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Promise of Love (Chapter 1)
Romance
 Created on 4-21-08
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When I was little girl, and I remembered my precious moment with my dear best friend, Jake. It was very lovely, shiny day out in hot summer near the beach. It was nice feeling the sand through my toes, walking toward the ocean away from my huge three-stories house. I sat there playing to build the castle all alone by myself. The sun smiled at my dark, long, wavy black hair, brightening my happiness. I sat on the sand in my black bikini, hearing the ocean wave roared and splashed against the sand. My eyes were contacted to the ocean, watching it all the times, and forgetting the sand castle.
I heard footsteps rush on the sand, didn't realize why. I didn't understand why but it supposed to be private beach, not for everybody. My parents never run on the beach. Suddenly, I heard a little boy's voice. "Hey you, can I play with you?" I slowly turned my head toward to a boy, asked. "Who are you? This beach supposed to be private." I didn't realize why, but wondered heavily in my thoughts. He was wearing the dark, red short without a shirt, and flip flop or shoes. Just a short. I saw his precious, light brunette hair in the sunshine. His eyes were young, gorgeous hazel, staring into his. His lips pressed against itself, saying. "Well, your parents invite my parents include me. Yeah, can we play? Pretty please!"
I nodded, asking one more time in a young, high pitch voice. "What's your name? I am Lynn." My lips strengthened to crack smiling, waiting for his reply. "Oh my name is Jake." Jake smiled widely, sitting down on the sand, "So, do you like building the sand castle? I love doing it all the times." The sun continued shinning on us all day along, playing with Jake. It was that day I became his best friend. I never thought any boy move in new house right next to my house in front of the ocean. My neighbor, best friend, and lover.
Author Note: This is last thing I can post this chapter. I won't able to post next chapter because I am not longer to post next chapter, so I can post this story in mibba.com. My username is xpunkxloverx08. Add me or ask me to add u only if u give me ur username. Thanks. That's all!
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Please Login to post comments| On August 17th 2008 Shannonism374l Said : | |
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omg im starting to addict this one...KMP! |
| On August 11th 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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| On June 10th 2008 CSLimeWriter Said : | |
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Like I said in your prologue; just work on making your tenses the same. Example of bad tense: "I senses him coming near by me." Example of good tense: "I sensed him coming near." Hopefully you'll find this helpful :) cool story line. Oh, and btw, whenever somebody says something, a new paragraph is started. Kmp |
| On June 9th 2008 mathstar Said : | |
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knmpppp. I thought I did comment it. but i gues I ddidnt. I did read again, and wow it goood story |
| On May 30th 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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ah i beg u to vote this story. trust me it will be very good story...yeah |
| On May 30th 2008 stephjane Said : | |
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omg kmpp!! i like it. it is really good.. |
| On May 23rd 2008 thatchickunew Said : | |
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kmpp this is good |
| On May 16th 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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Testriffic is not going to shut down. Please comment and rate! 10 VOTES AND ABOVE so i can continue writing next chapter. Although i already wrote chapter 2 and 3. yeah. |
| On April 21st 2008 Slackee Said : | |
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It's awesome! |
| On April 21st 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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If u rate it, then comment! Please! |
