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I was a Sixth Grade dance!
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 Created on 7-21-07
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I found it, I never trash it!
I wrote it when I was in sixth grade, in english class. We doing Essay! Everybody say that I am good written but few spelling errors but I was tried my best!! But it seen like it really weird but it was my idea when I was in 6th grade! Lol Here is!!
After school, all 6 grade went to dance and there were many students! This is a special dance because it is last one today. I saw my boyfriend was here. My boyfriend's name Davie. David walked toward me and he said, "Hey Nicole! How are you? I'm fine!" I was shy to him. And I said, "Hey, David! How are you? I'm fine!"
At the dance the DJ played the music. The DJ said, "Time to play games now!" the students said, "Yeah!" Now, time for a slow dance. David and I were dancing to really slow music.
I felt hungry and I told David I said, "I need some food and drink. Do you want some drink and food?" David said, "sure! Just a little food and drink." David and I walked toward the snack bar. I bought the food and soda. David bought the candy and soda.
The DJ said, "Last of slow dance!" David and I were dancing again. The student's parents picked up the students to go home. David's parents were a little late. My mom was here. I said, "Bye-bye David. I had great fun at the dance! You, too." David said, "Bye-bye Nicole. I had great fun at dance! You, too." The last dance was GREAT!!!
What ya think? I know some really wrong gramma sentence...but not my fault! Or, weird story..I don't care. Ratee/comment this!! Thanks!
I wrote it when I was in sixth grade, in english class. We doing Essay! Everybody say that I am good written but few spelling errors but I was tried my best!! But it seen like it really weird but it was my idea when I was in 6th grade! Lol Here is!!
After school, all 6 grade went to dance and there were many students! This is a special dance because it is last one today. I saw my boyfriend was here. My boyfriend's name Davie. David walked toward me and he said, "Hey Nicole! How are you? I'm fine!" I was shy to him. And I said, "Hey, David! How are you? I'm fine!"
At the dance the DJ played the music. The DJ said, "Time to play games now!" the students said, "Yeah!" Now, time for a slow dance. David and I were dancing to really slow music.
I felt hungry and I told David I said, "I need some food and drink. Do you want some drink and food?" David said, "sure! Just a little food and drink." David and I walked toward the snack bar. I bought the food and soda. David bought the candy and soda.
The DJ said, "Last of slow dance!" David and I were dancing again. The student's parents picked up the students to go home. David's parents were a little late. My mom was here. I said, "Bye-bye David. I had great fun at the dance! You, too." David said, "Bye-bye Nicole. I had great fun at dance! You, too." The last dance was GREAT!!!
What ya think? I know some really wrong gramma sentence...but not my fault! Or, weird story..I don't care. Ratee/comment this!! Thanks!
Comments
Please Login to post comments| On April 28th 2008 AnimaniacAsh Said : | |
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cool story I like it, it's really SWEET!
-Ash |
| On March 17th 2008 keegan17 Said : | |
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Good grammar is boring hah! |
| On February 14th 2008 chorusgal Said : | |
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yeah it was good just needed a little work on the flow, sentence structure, and grammar but over all it was good |
| On February 11th 2008 mitchy8125 Said : | |
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NICE only you need to work on the grammer, but anyways, i like the story!! |
| On February 10th 2008 tumblegrl1994 Said : | |
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pretty good, not counting the errors, but very nice! :) |
| On January 10th 2008 lequime Said : | |
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boring |
| On August 26th 2007 Ericnessxo Said : | |
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Awe. Sweet. Grammar doesnt matter to me, just as long as i can see the picture. I got a clear visual of the whole story.♥ Nice work♥.. |
| On July 21st 2007 DorkyBoo08 Said : | |
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Great story. Not bad, and no bad grammar, and just few mistakes but not bad. |
| On July 21st 2007 mathstar Said : | |
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Nice story. But I think there is no grammar. I don't good at grammar |
