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One fine day

One fine day

Creative Created on 6-28-08 Views(84) Story Rating G

    

             It was a day like any other, a saturday to be presisce, and jay had once again awoken to the sounds

 of plates smashing and his mother screaming. He waited with baited breath until he heard the door slam and

 he knew his stepfather, Tommy, had left, running down stairs he found his mother sitting at the table crying. He sat in

 front of her, 'mum, why do you put up with it?' to this his mother replied 'it's ok, you just get to school i'll

 sort this out' she gave him a watery smile, but he wasn't fooled, but what could he do? Tommy had reigned

 the household for years now. With a heavy heart he gave his mum a hug and got ready for school.

 

              At school he couldn't focus on his work, so at breaktime he decided to 'go home'. Walking down

the street he stopped and stood facing the bus stop and the road home, in his mind he had a desision to make , go home

 or find tommy and confront him about this morning. In the end he decided to take the bus to tommys work.

 when he arrived stood facing the yard where he worked, took a deep breath and with trembling hands opened

 the wrougt iron gate.

 

              'jay! what are you doing here?' came tommys hoarse voice, jay turned to see his stepfather who was

  standing by a pile of metal and suddenly fought to himself 'this is a bad idea' but he couldn't just walk away

 without saying anything so he replied 'I need to talk to you' his voice trembling, 

'come into the office' replied tommy with a wary look.

 

Jay took a seat in the dingy little office, 'cup of tea?' tommy was standing

by the sink, 'no thanks, can we just talk please' jay was already in two minds to run or

stay. 'fine, what is it?' jay shifted his wieght uncomfortably on the chair 'look, i don't

like the way you treat my mum, i... i... want you to leave' tommy looked at jay for a

minute then burst out laughing 'what?' trembled jay, 'you what!? you're of your head boy,

i'm not leaving, did your mother put you up to this? i bet she did the little...' jay got off

his chair like a bolt of lightning, and punched tommy in the face with all his might,

'what the...?' tommy gasped, they for what seemed an eternity, facing eachother in shock,

then jay, coming to his senses, ran for his life.

 

Out side in the yard he heard tommy smash through the office door and he ran faster

then he'd ever run in his life. He could here tommy's footsteps behind him as he

ran the mile to the bus stop, but as he got another burst of adrenilin

he tripped and fell to the ground. Tommy realising his victory sat on him and pulled

something shiny from his pocket, jay felt his breath catch in his throat,

it took him a split second to realise the shiny thing was a knife, so with all his might

he tried to grab the knife off tommy.

 

Not realising that he'd tripped in an alley way he tried to look around for

someone to help, but in vain, he and tommy struggled with the knife,

twisting about with it for what seemed like hours,

'Aaaaaaaaaahhhh!!!!!!!' jay stopped, he was confused at wether,

it had come from his him or tommy, and then he looked down,

and screamed.

 

Jay, while trying to get the knife off tommy, had accidently plunged it into tommys

chest. He got up and ran, and kept on running till he got to the bus stop, in the distance,

he could here sirens, 'someone must of herd us scream' he thought, he waited at

the bus stop for about half an hour going over and over in his head what had

happened when he heard a male voice say ' son, can you come with me please'.

Jay looked up to see a police officer standing over him, 'i haven't done anything' he

said scared, ' i'll be the judge of that' and in a split second he was handcuffed and

put into a police van'.

 

Jay sat in the back of the police van thinking 'how did they know it was me?' when they      

pulled up and and he was taken into the building, and shoved into a cell.

Hours later he heard the bolt slide open, and the door opened to reveal his mum,

'mum!' he jumped up and hugged her, the police officer said 'you have ten minutes'

and left with a glaring at jay, 'what the hell happened?!' cried his mum, jay told

her everything. After, his mum stood and stared at him and spoke the words that

would haunt him for life, 'jay...tommys dead, there saying the least you'll get is

25 years in prison'.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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On July 21st 2008 MizzKierra14 Said :
MizzKierra14 good job :)
On June 29th 2008 sweetastic18 Said :
sweetastic18 i agree with ddiana3...it was kinda rushed and def needed more details bit i really liked it! def keep writing!
On June 29th 2008 onelove6fs Said :
onelove6fs i was only gonna read like the first line,but it was so good,so i read the whole thing.Keep writing
On June 28th 2008 ddiana3 Said :
ddiana3 very nice. good. a bit fast paced. you could have made it longer added a bit more detail to. it but otherwise it was AWESOME! great job! if there is more ppkmp
On June 28th 2008 Kidojidoari Said :
Kidojidoari I loved it. :0 Very intense. Such a somewhat cruel ending. :] As if everyone lost anyway. :/
On June 28th 2008 kalenna4 Said :
kalenna4 that was good
On June 28th 2008 MaraLicious177 Said :
MaraLicious177 wow, very suspenseful. a few gramatical errors but i love the content. if there's more, kmp!