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Tragedy Created on 12-14-07 Views(299) Story Rating G

  • she looked like she been running then he noticed that jenny knew her and she walked all the way there, as Jenny saw the nurse her color started to change; she looked like she is freaking out. He prayed it wasn’t bad news, as she walked to the door. He wanted to go to her and see what's going on then once again he wasn’t family or anything. And he didn’t want to interrupt. He could hear her heart pounding and see her starts to shake. Her eyes was sparking,, filled with tears. He finally decided he was going to go to her as he finally threw the coffee away, he went over to them and asked
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  • "is everything all right?"
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  • As Jenny broke down crying and hugged him, at first he was shocked and blushed for a bit, then he held her looking at the nurse puzzled eyes. Then the nurse asked
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  • "Are you her boy friend? Because you should really get her home and rested. She refuses to listen to anyone here.”
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  • He held her as he asked
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  • " I hope you don’t mind but what happened?"
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  • "well, I am just telling Miss Thompson about the results of some of her mothers tests. And we are going to need to set up a meeting with her and the doctor later, seeing as she is the next of kin and that she shouldn’t get in there"
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  • "Oh ok thanks"
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  • He led her to a row of big chairs near the back. It was quieter over here, and a little darker. He didn’t know what to say he wanted to say its going to be all right then once again he remembered last time he said that it didn’t turn out even near okay. She really looked exhausted so he finally said 
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  • “You really should rest. You look like you could use it.”
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  • I can’t … Every time I start to sleep I start to think about how scared my mom must have been, and I wasn’t there. I can’t let her wake up alone too.
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  • "okay, listen here is what we are going to do, you get some sleep here; you are not allowed into her room anyway, so you sleep and I will stay here and let you know if she woke up! How does that sound?"
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  • She was weak from all the crying and couldn’t fight so she just nodded and lead down he took his jacket off and covered her with it, as he played with her hair few minute later she went to sleep. His results came over, he took them yet however couldn’t leave. His daughter started getting tired as well and slept between his arms.  Then he realized Jenny's  breathing started to go fast and she was sweating, crying in her sleep as if she was having a really bad nightmare so he woke her up
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  • "Jenny, Jenny" he said softly 
  • She woke up and shouted something; still crying
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  • "Its okay; it's just a dream, don’t worry about it"
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  • She calmed down; he went and brought her a cup of water and some food "you need to eat"
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  • He sounded so firm as if he wouldn’t expect no for an answer, and usually she would refuse strongly but she couldn’t say no
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  •  “Thank you for staying. And for helping me back there. How long have I been sleeping?”
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  • “About three hours. You should get more sleep.”
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  • “I couldn’t sleep any more. That was more sleep at one time I have gotten all week though… Thanks again.”
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  •  “How long do you have to stay here?”
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  • “Poor girl, I’m afraid it’s not to fun for her here.”
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  • ************** flash back
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  • "Why did you leave me Sandra? You know I can't raise a child on my own! Its too hard! Too much responsibility. You promised you would change her dippers! You promised you will play with her at night when she wakes everyone up! How am I suppose to do it on my own now, its hard enough not being with you! How am I supposed to show her how amazing you were! She is three months now; look at her, man she looks like you! I need to get a job; I cant rely on my sister anymore; her husband wouldn’t stop complaining and I don’t blame him really; it just that I don’t know what to do! Oh, I dropped out of school and am going to look for a job. Also I am moving in with Jim and Jake. I know you don’t like them but they are cool! It's so funny now all our names starts with a J. I think it’s a curse or something ha ha ha, so what do you think babe? Why are you all quiet! Oh you know what's really cool you can say whatever I want you to say. Visit her at night and tell me am doing all right because I have no idea what am doing or how am I suppose to do it! Help me baby!"
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  • As he kisses her grave "say bye bye to mummy now"
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  • ***************end of the flash back
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  • As he realized he was spacing out again then he said
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  • “She is a good girl. She never did give me trouble with anything.”
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  •  He laughed a little. “Being a single dad I have had to take her plenty of places she would rather not go. She deals with it.”
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  • He noticed she was still hungry so was he and his daughter must've been
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  •  “Do you have any more food?”

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On December 21st 2007 Smarties4 Said :
Smarties4 Nice
On December 21st 2007 eternallpain Said :
eternallpain ur soo GOOD!!! i got it just fine! :) ... this story is soo sad ... u guys always get me tearing up :( love it
On December 15th 2007 JessicAngel Said :
JessicAngel the beginning is very confusing, i could tell who the pronouns were in the beginning, nor do i think he'd be able to hear the heartbeat of a person, unless he was against hers, so that's a little silly; also watch your caps and end punctuations. they are distracting and sometimes change meanings. yet & however are the same don't need to use both. the flashback is very confusing, who is he talking to, why, is the baby with him, is he speaking out loud....sorry i sound all nit-picky but this one was really hard to keep my attention with all of that. :P you might wanna have tece look at it for you before you submit it or something, she seems to be better at doing those things.
On December 14th 2007 PunkRockNerdxX Said :
PunkRockNerdxX Aww he's such a good daddy. Great story so far. Please keep me posted.
On December 14th 2007 kg108551 Said :
kg108551 Nice!
On December 14th 2007 beccaboo073189 Said :
beccaboo073189 awww, i luv this so much! good job, keep me posted!
On December 14th 2007 CSLimeWriter Said :
CSLimeWriter aww :)
On December 14th 2007 Khmerfriendz Said :
Khmerfriendz keep me posted!
On December 14th 2007 unknownwolfie Said :
unknownwolfie mak sure to check the other half of the story on tece's page .. a daughters love! u dont wanna miss tht one she z soo GOOD!
On December 14th 2007 tece26 Said :
tece26 nyoure full of suprises aren't you! Nice add there. Love it.