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I walked into the room which held my victim, a man in rusty shackles on a chain that was attached to the floor, I smiled as i looked at him for this was my 10th victim and i needed to do something a little more creative. He started to yell obscenities at me. either that I'm a fag or a piece of shit and he was gonna kick my ass once those shackles just magically disappeared. I just looked down at him in disgust and placed a few weapons on the table to the south side wall. i grabbed a scalpel,walked over to him and bent over. I spoke to just once and said "do you know why your here?"
"I'm gonna fucking kill you!" he continuously growled and never had i been so disgusted to be put in the same category to him. I placed the scalpel on his shoulder and slit it down to his wrist missing the vein that would take his life to fast. His scream satisfied so that i tore his left arm open and watched the blood begin to flow. his yelling began to increase and i began to dissect his arm. "it is funny but do not many impurities in here, bodily fluids and living tissue. there is no sin, why isn't that as easily seen as your outer appearance?"
He did not answer and anything he did yell randomly isn't worth speaking of. I finished doing as i wanted with his left arm and decided to go back to where i got my scalpel to grab a two liter bottle filled with salt. I went back to my victim and begun pouring salt on his exposed muscles and other tissues to dehydrate it. He continued to yell at a tone I've never heard a man go up to and after a while his body began giving up on it. I left him there for later and decided to head up to the higher floors of my house. My house was an old agent base and I have basements below basements, useful to stop the world from knowing where I am or what I do in this place. I walked up to basement just two floors below my living room and saw a woman I put in earlier. She was a blond about 5'2 and attached into a stretcher with her top exposed. My smile widened for I already knew what I had planned for her.
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| On January 15th 2008 ALOFAINA Said : | |
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awwwww....KMP..love it!! |
| On December 28th 2007 JWalker2406 Said : | |
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Pretty good story yet again :D Just need to (like others have said) go back and straighten out the run-ons and grammar mistakes, as well as captilization. Maybe try using the grammar/spell checker if your computer has one, some do not. I use it a lot for my stories though sometimes I forget and others who read it can tell lol. Anyhoo, I like it :D |
| On December 26th 2007 onaipwolf Said : | |
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I agree with CaPlanePourToi, it is pretty good. Just fix up the few confusing sentences and it's fine. :) |
| On December 10th 2007 SoraDemon Said : | |
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i really love this
the way you describe putting them through the torture is really good
please keep me posted |
| On December 2nd 2007 CaPlanePourToi Said : | |
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reminds me of "Darkly Dreaming Dexter." Good suspense and irony. A couple sentances are run ons. It's pretty good overall. |
| On December 2nd 2007 KrystalToney Said : | |
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owwwwwwwwww...keep me posted please |


