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the darkened heart

the darkened heart

Creative Created on 11-27-07 Views(96) Story Rating G

      I walked around my town to free my mind of what continuously haunted me. everyone who has lost a love, knows the feeling, it's as if you've lost a piece of you has been destroyed. and what made sense before is nothing more than a memory in your faded past. most slowly get over there pain and find another but i could not. my mind never let something go easy, so i walked, wandered my empty streets, and hoped that the pain would disappear.

     My final decision was to go to where the love of my life, my dark angel first began to haunt my memories. i walked into the forest, to the place where we lied but as i approached it, pain began to pulse through my mind as if i was not ready to deal with this....place. my hands held my head while my vision went blurry. i was 5 feet away and my knees gave out to the pain and finally i crawled to that single place. i sat there holding my head about to black out and i heard myself yell to the sky "God make this pain go away!!". if i ever wanted to have proof that god would help me, that was it. the pain disappeared, my mind was clear and my feelings for her were a distant memory and all that remained was a final whisper I'll always love you" in my voice that moved with the wind.

        My pain was gone, and my memory is free. I wish i could feel happy about it but the truth is i didn't really remember it so there was nothing to feel happy about. i realized that i didn't even know what happiness was anymore, i could do no more than place a fake smile. i wonder what else would have effect by freeing myself from pain.


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On December 28th 2007 JWalker2406 Said :
JWalker2406 Nice story. But I do agree with the others. It is a bit confusing but only because of grammar mistakes and a few misspelled words. Also remember to capitilize as well. I would also encourage you to keep writing. While it wasn't the best put together story on here(mine included lol) it was a pretty good read as far as the story line goes. :)
On December 26th 2007 onaipwolf Said :
onaipwolf It is a great idea fora story. While I can see what you were going for, the beginning paragraph is kind of hard to make sense of. It is several run-on sentences sort of smashed together. But you have a lot of potential in this story, and I would encourage you to keep working on it. :)
On November 27th 2007 CaPlanePourToi Said :
CaPlanePourToi It has a good concept. Is it a true story? It's a little hard to follow, but heartfelt.