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A TIME I'LL NEVER FORGET 1

sorry its been so long i had surgy and was out for awile. oh and im going to be having another part of this coming out from nates pov. any idea wht i should name it
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My hands are shaking but I cant stop them. I try to hold them still but its no use. And they get even worse as the car pulls infornt of the most amazing house i have ever seen. It's 2stories high. theres a big picture window on the first floor. I let out a breath that I didnt even know I was holding as the driver opens my door. I see a man walking out the door. I consider just staying in the car and going back home. Becasue this man is deff not Nate. Nate is tall and has long brow wavy hair and brown eyes with a little scar above the left one. The man walking towards me is shorter. Blond surfer hair and blue eyes by the look of it. He takes my bags fomr the man who drove the car and looks in my door flashing me a sweet smile. extending his hands he helps me out of the car.

"I know I know i dont look anything like the Nate..thats because Im not..hi im Rick...Nates bestfriend.

Once again I let out a breath I had no clue I was holding.

"Im sisi but you prob all ready know that" I give a nerves giggle.

"haha ya i kinda figured that. Nates up in his room. he asked me to come meet you hes being kinda shy"

"I dont blam him i amost consider going back home"

Rick lead me up the path and opens the door for me. The inside is even more beautiful than the outside. Theres pictures of friends and family all over the place. taking my bags Ricks takes them to the spare bedroom as i stand and stare at the picture. My heart starts to pound as I hear Rick trying to convince Nate to come out and meet me. I press my hand over my heart to try and steady it. It was no use. I hear a door creak but I cant seem to turn around But as soon as I hear his voice I know its him.

"Hi...Hi Sisi..im glad you could make it"

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On January 23rd 2009 brokenwings122 Said: 
brokenwings122 Its not bad, you could do quite a bit with the plot line you set up. However, you should use spell check and then proofread for grammar. The technical mistakes really take away from the story.