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Forbidden pt 1
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'so you like will, Zoey?'
she asked egarly waiting for an answer, ignoring her i focused all my attention on will, forbidden fruit was always the nicest. I called over for a refreshment, "oi bar bitch, two more'.
Glancing at him i watched his every movement not allowing him to make a move i didn't know about, he smiled as he strolled over to our table.
'is that all ladies?'
i looked him i the eyes, and pulled him closer, ' you will do fine' i whispered,smiling he left our table. I still didn't glance away.
Kelly persisted with her questions, after what seemed like hours, i gave in.
'yes and i'm going to make him mine.'
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| On February 17th 2008 brokenwings122 Said : | |
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I agree with Sk8ncutie001, you really should writie longer pieces. This length is really only acceptable for a prologue or intro. Write longer with more detail. If you do, kmp. |
| On February 17th 2008 Sk8ncutie001 Said : | |
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Ur not gonna get any ratings unless theyre LONGER! |


