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Midnight Tears Intro and ProlougeAuthors Comments: Hey hope you liked the intro ill wait for ratings of at least 15 to continue and cant wait to read those comments! Thx again!
Romance
 Created on 9-7-08
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 Story Rating PG
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Authors Note: This is a story written by my friend and I.It is still being worked on as we only have the first few chapters,but anyway I've decided to post this on here so we could get some feedback on it and maybe even quite a few sejustions for the next chapters.We hope to get this book published and you might find this crazy but we're working on the sequal at the same time. Well enough of my talking here's the prolouge let me no what you think so i can continue. Note the chapters are pretty short. Enjoy!
Prolouge
My forms shake and for once I'm all at once. I lay on the ground wishing to only die. Tears roll down my face as I think of Vincent. His angel like features flow through my head increasing my pain and sorrow. Why him? Why not me? How could it end like this?!
Comments
Please Login to post comments| On September 9th 2008 shorteyjr Said : | |
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ok thx ill go ahead and add the 1st chapter too and fix the authors comments. |
| On September 7th 2008 jirrith2007 Said : | |
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The prologue is too short to tell anything. And it's spelled suggestions, not sejustions. And don't set rates on the first prologue/chapter, because on this site, its good to not set your sights too high at first until after the first few chapters. If the prologue was longer, it could tell more of what is happening and draw more people in to read it. |
