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(Luminance) 2

Creative Created on 5-15-08 Views(133) Story Rating G

 
Kazuki

            He peered up at the clock hanging above the classroom door. 
            “11:58” It read.

            He let out a soft groan; there were still 19 minutes left in the most boring class in the world: Spanish.
            Profe was droning on about verb usage but Kazuki wasn’t listening. He had more important things on his mind like what his mother was going to make for dinner.
            Spaghetti, he hoped.
            “¿Luz?” Profe asked. It was his Spanish name.
            “¿Si? ” He frantically tried to remember what she had been talking about, dearly hoping that she wasn’t going to ask him a question because he was sure he’d get it wrong.
            “¿Entiendes?” What did that mean?
            “Uh, si.”
            “Que bueno.” With that she turned back to speaking to the class, and Kazuki tuned her out again.
            He didn’t understand what was so important about Spanish. If he had any control over his life he was determined to make sure that all his business was done in English. It was a lot easier that way, less stress on the brain.
            He checked the clock again.
            “11:59”
            It had only been a minute!
            He drummed his fingers on his desk impatiently, silently praying for time to move faster.
            The end of this class marked the beginning of lunch, his favorite part of school. Because it was at that time he was allowed to leave the school campus and go home to eat; homemade sandwiches were way better than the processed food they served in the school cafeteria.
            They were given an hour for lunch. Luckily, Kazuki only lived a couple blocks away, giving him time to walk home, make a quick sandwich, and still have free time before he had to report back to school, caged, and ordered to learn.   
“11:59” Still.
            He wished he could just leave. 17 minutes seemed too long to suffer through conjugated verbs and correlating adjectives, especially in another language. To him it was all just a pointless waste of energy, so why bother? The whole school system seemed flawed to him. It was as stiff and rigid as the people who came up with it. They didn’t consider the fact that most students would rather a more flexible schedule, and would do so much better in a more calming environment. Instead of the cramped closets they call classrooms.
            That’s why he liked his home. He lived with a substantially rich foster family, and it was the best one he had had since his childhood. Both his foster parents had pretty good paying jobs so they were able to afford quite a large house. Unlike all his other foster parents; they were not in it for the money but rather to give a poor child a better upbringing.  So they gave him his own room and treated him like a son. He finally felt accepted.
            He turned his attention to the clock again, watching as the second hand slowly crept over the 10.
            Thinking about his home made him really wish he was there instead of at school.
            Five seconds until noon, but 5 seconds and 16 minutes until he could leave.
            He wondered absently if his foster mother would be there. Sometimes she’d stop over during her lunch break.
            Three seconds and 16 minutes left.
            What would he make for lunch? A nice ham and cheese sandwich sounded pretty good, maybe with some potato chips and a nice glass of grape juice.
            There were 1 second and 16 minutes to go.
            12:00.
            “¿Luz?” He faintly heard someone ask.
Suddenly everything turned a bright white before flashing back to the classroom. Then, before he could even register what had happened the room seemed to blur and fly past his eyes in sharp horizontal lines of color. An instant later he found himself standing on a porch in front of a door.
He took a staggering step backwards. It was his house.
What happened?

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On June 8th 2008 ridinbitch0807 Said :
ridinbitch0807 wow weird. kmp!!!
On June 1st 2008 olchii Said :
olchii you neeeed to finnish or at leasts make anether chapter. come on throw me a bone
On May 25th 2008 b33cool Said :
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lovinn itt kmp plzzzz!!! xxxooo also keep writing thirst/onceaponatime xxxooo ps b33cool!!1
On May 25th 2008 pellagirl933 Said :
pellagirl933 wat the...lol please keep me posted
On May 24th 2008 twilight8218 Said :
twilight8218 kmp!
On May 21st 2008 chayeah22 Said :
chayeah22 Omg! This rocks! kmp....And btw I disagree with Perdylilpyro, some books are more interesting with more characters. You get bored sometimes reading about the same people. Jumping around from point of views keeps the story fresh.
On May 20th 2008 sillybrat Said :
sillybrat kmp! love ur story!
On May 19th 2008 perdylilpyro Said :
perdylilpyro I'm not sure how far you've gotten in writing this story so far but if I might offer some advice, I'd suggest keeping a max of five or six characters, just while your reader gets to know them. It's a good idea for the reader to have a solid idea of who these characters are as well as a feel for how they are apt to act, especially as you switch from character to character as the plot unfolds.
On May 19th 2008 perdylilpyro Said :
perdylilpyro mmm, first there's the possibly invisible Kiran, now we have an interesting telleportation instance with Kazuki; I really do like your knack for bewildering phenomena
On May 18th 2008 smartb18 Said :
smartb18 whoa....creppy....i love it! kmp please please please
On May 17th 2008 jaylynn142434 Said :
jaylynn142434 whoa....WEIRD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! kmp plzplzplz!!
On May 16th 2008 stubishead Said :
stubishead OMGOSH IM IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY . kmp =)
On May 16th 2008 rosebrugh Said :
rosebrugh it is confusing but it is good...kmp
On May 16th 2008 ShiningKanin Said :
ShiningKanin omg... that's FREAKISH! i love it! keep me posted please!
On May 16th 2008 tibbskidoo Said :
tibbskidoo WEIRD! kmp