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Gruesome |
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Life Goes On |
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Mabudachi Trio Fans here |
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Lucifer exerpt froma roleplay with a friend |
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Torture |
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:D! LAWLERCAUST |
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As Death Overcomes You |
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Old People es Muy Loco |
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Queen Fan: ::His eyes widened. He was in shock..He watched the man thrash around...:: "No.." ::he whispered to himself. He watched the man die...it was so sad, as he tried to flee for his life. His heart seemed to break. He didn't want things to end up like this..he would have rather died than have this happen...he would have spent his years lying in hell, cold as ice, if it meant that Her and Tenshi could be alive and happy and not killing anyone else...never....again.. The tears poured from his eyes. This was the worst...he wished this were just all a nightmare::
Una quensse: *she felt the sun begin to crest the sky and droped the corpse to the road leaving the edivince for al to see. then turned toward him and licked her lips. her eyes now focusing as she looked down to herself and began to shake. "it..it burn" she first said camly then looked to him. her skin beginning to turn pink from sun burn "it..it burns!"
Queen Fan: "Shit!!" ::He covered her with his own body...Tenshi had already jumped op onto a porch where the sun couldn't get him. Kuro hugged her tightly and pulled her away slowly, hoping no one would come out and see him and Tenshi and her, especially Tenshi, he was naked...::
Una quensse: *she nodded to him now beginning to understand the sun was cuasing her harm and took off like a jet toward her tree house. leaping the 20 feet up to the porch where she then ran inside and stood in the corner. holding her hand to ehr face and feeling her teeth. her mind coming back as the blood began to settle within her gut and let her animal side subside. *"whats going on..what am i?"
Queen Fan: ::He felt her rip rom her arms. He looked back to Tenshi, a young couple already screaming their head soff at him, scared of the wings and why he's on the porch. The lady was crying in fear. The man ran inside.. Kuro knew what was going to happen he ran to the porch quickly and stood infront of Tenshi, the man came out with a very old type gun.(like i guess when they first came out XD) and began to aim:: "Sir please wait, you don't understand.." ::HE sanarled:: "I understand perfectly boy, now get out of the way"
Una quensse: *she growled "where are they...?" she waited and then closed her eyes serching. "where...the porch" she growled."they all can die, i did not pay for a foolish human to hurt my men" she clentched her fist and grabed a small dagger from the table. taking her heavy cloak and throwing it over herself as she headed out the door. "good girl" a voice was heard as she leaped from the treehouse proch and then ran, faster then she ever had toward the farm house. *fixing* the problem she had created.
Queen Fan: ::Tenshi had started to cry and babble, because he couldn't talk still, when the soul was brought back from the dead, when the wing were switched, the powers were gone and now all that was left was this babbling fool as some would say:: ::The old man yelled:: "WHAT'S HE SAYING SOME KIND OF CURSE???" ::he cocked the gun and Tenshi ducked behind Kuro and cried:: "Sir please, he can't talk, he doesn't know how..it's not a curse or anything i assure you"
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| On July 20th 2007 jlaufer Said : | |
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Its excellent i like it alot! though there are some parts where you could of used more descriptive words eg.He watched the man die...it was so sad. You could change "it was so sad" around a bit to make it sound more dramatic.but you dont have to take my advice its totally up to you i dont want to reck your story! =) |


