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Creative Created on 7-2-07 Views(81) Story Rating G

She ran her fingers over the keys on the keyboard.  She pressed the power button and smiled as the set greeting flashed a "Hello, Julia!". 

"Thanks Dad.  I really love it!"  Her dad grinned down at her, because he knew she'd love it.  After her mother had died two years before, pretty much the only friend Julia had was the computers down at the library.  She didn't just use them to email her friends and whatnot, though, she used them to write stories, poems, she used them to make business cards to sell to local businesses to make money to help out the family. 

He patted her shoulder.  "I'm glad you like it, Julie."  He left her alone with her mother's old computer.

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Time passed so slowly.  Renee chewed on the end of her pencil and stared, non blinking, at the clock.  She could not possibly believe that only 3 minutes had passed since she'd been in the office.  It had felt like a lifetime. 

Let's see what had they said?  Oh yeah, that "your aunt? Aunt called to let us know that your dad won't pick you up from school today, but she'll be here." 

"Which Aunt?" Renee had asked.  It was Aunt Julie.  Renne loved Aunt Julie, but she wanted to know why her dad couldn't pick her up.

As Renee continued to stare over at the clock, the rest of the class was staring at her.  She had refused to tell anyone why seh had been called to the office, and she had twelve notes lying in the middle of her book to prove it.

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On July 3rd 2007 grassfairy02 Said :
grassfairy02 oh, by the way, tell me when the next one is out plZ!
On July 3rd 2007 grassfairy02 Said :
grassfairy02 i like the first, less confusing for me.
On July 2nd 2007 jjhassan Said :
jjhassan The first one is better written, however I'm not sure how you'd carry it on. You obviously have some idea? Try to avoid clichés too, you don't want your stuff to be like everything else that's out there; read before you write. You have style but need to proof read a bit too to avoid spelling mistakes et cetera. Write in word first maybe.
On July 2nd 2007 Chelsea12093 Said :
Chelsea12093 The first intro seems well worth to continue. I thought both were really good but the first was the best. Keep me posted when you continue your story=)