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Broken Smiles Part 11

Creative Created on 7-9-07 Views(187) Story Rating G

Part 11
Aria’s P.O.V.
    Jack is a pushover. At least, that’s what I’ve decided. I mean, I love him and all of that, but still… it’s Jack. The boy I fell in love with while surrounded by wet, molding, skateboarding carpet. Maybe I was hit on the head and I just don’t remember it. Maybe he’s a wizard and I was put under a spell. Or maybe I just love this boy. Wow, I’m retarded.
    “What’s wrong Ar?” Jack looked worried.
    “Nothin,” I sighed. Jack handed me an apple. He’d just gotten back from the kitchen. “Thanks.”
    “No problem.” He looked at me with his baby blue eyes. “What are you thinking about?”
    “Love, life… you.” I said quietly, starting to get a bit mad. “How my life has been effected since I fell in love with you and how I could’ve been famous if I didn’t love you so amazingly much-”
    Jack cut me off with the most surprising words a fifteen year old could ever hear.
    “Then let’s get married.”
    Whoa.

Jack’s P.O.V.
    Oh. My. God. I just proposed! To Aria!!! Wow. She’s kind of giving me this blank look. Sort of like, did you just ask that?! The weird thing is, I’m asking myself the same thing.
    “Are you sure?” She suddenly asks.
    “Of course.” I say quickly. Possibly a bit too quickly.
    “Yeah, let’s get married.” She says, the biggest smile I’ve ever seen is plastered on her perfect face. I kiss her. I notice how much we kiss and start to smile into the kiss. She pulls back and gives me this look like, huh?
    “We kiss a lot.” I said, kind of childishly. “I’m just way too lucky.”
    “You’re lucky? You should try kissing... Yourself!” she laughed, I love her laugh, did I  mention that?
    “I don’t think it works that way, babe.” I laughed along with her. “Maybe we could try a bit more than just kissing?” Her laughter stopped.
    “What are you thinking about?” Is she actually considering this?!
    “You know, maybe you and I could play around a bit?” I said, trying as hard as I could not to say the three lettered word I knew I was bound to hear.
    “Sex?” She said uneasily.
    “Sex…” I said, a bit too confident for my own good.
    
AUTHORS NOTE

So tell me how you like it, if I don't get many comments or ratings, I'll probably just quit writing it. If I  have enough readers, I'll actually post the part that has  sex in it soon. That's the 13th chapter, the 12th is worse, content wise, I'm trying to make these longer, though. So comments and ratings are what keep me writing! They're very appreciated!

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On July 9th 2007 kantokah Said :
kantokah i luv the story. i had to read through all of it before i could comment. its a great story and its well written but i think that something need to happen and soon or at least fill in the lost time. this could be a great book type deal if u get more detailed and readly let u in the minds of the characters.
On July 9th 2007 chickenbroth Said :
chickenbroth yay!
On July 9th 2007 ods411 Said :
ods411 i love it lets hope they do IT!!! lol
On July 9th 2007 october1015 Said :
october1015 I love it! reminds me of the old days....... lol. anyways u better write more. grrr