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The Change Part One

Creative Created on 9-22-07 Views(58) Story Rating G

"Please Connor, don't hurt me! Please!" screamed Darlene in the alley.

Darlene was a 17 year old girl who was dating a boy name Connor.

He was 19 and he always was abusive.

He saw Darlene talking to some boys earlier that day in school and he wanted to kill her.

He grabbed Darlene by the neck and lifted her up.

"Aggghhh." Darlene was choking.

"Shut up bitch. If you don't scream, I won't hurt you." said Connor.

He loosened his grip.

"I'm sorry Connor. I didn't mean to talk to them. I was trying to----"

Connor punched Darlene in the stomach.

Tears started to form in Darlene's eyes but she didn't cry because she knew he would kill her.

He pushed her onto one of the dumpsters and put a blade to her throat.

"I'll kill you. I'll do it quicker than you ever expected. So you better not make a sound." threatened Connor.

He started to beat on Darlene.

She started to scream, he was hurting her so bad.

She couldn't take the pain.

She wanted him to stop so she said,

"I love you Connor. Please don't hurt me anymore. I just want us to be together." said Darlene.

"Didn't I tell you to be quiet?!?!?!" asked Connor.

He kicked her in the stomach and walked off as if he was going to get something.

Darlene didn't see him so she struggled to get up.

She limped over to the end of the alley.

"Are you running away from me bitch!!!!????" Connor screamed after her.

Darlene looked back, but it was too late.

Connor had rammed the blade into her chest.

Darlene fell to the ground.

Connor knelt down to Darlene's dead body.

"Haha, I told you not to run." said Connor.

Connor wasn't mad, or sad, or anything about killing Darlene.

All he felt was....nothing.

He took someone's life away and felt nothing.

Connor got back into his car to go home.

He started to sing his own song he made up,

"Just killed me a lady. I feel so good. Never thought it be this way but I guess I miss understood."

How could he be so sick.

Darlene was perfect.

She was smart, beautiful, creative, and nice.

She had a little sister, and a mom and dad.

And a life.

Connor had arrived home and got into his bed and watched some TV.

He decided to call a girl name Casey Martin.

"Hey Casey, why do you like that Matthew boy? And that fight you had with Lana. Damn that was so hot."

Authors Note: Hey have you heard of the character Casey Martin in any of my previous stories. Hint, Hint. Or Matthew, or Lana.

"Leave me alone Connor. I like Matthew." said Casey.

"OK fine fine." said Connor.

It started to some back to Connor.

He just killed a girl he loved so much.

"No!!!!!!" screamed Connor.

"Casey come back!!!!!!!!!!! I didn't mean to kill you!!!!!!!" screamed Connor.

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The next day when the police were patrolling, they went into the alley and saw Darlene's body.

They reported it to the detective's.

They found out her name because he student I.D was in her pocket.

They contacted Darlene's family.

Her family was so hurt.

Her father nearly went crazy.

They had her funeral 6 days later.

"No!!!! She can't be gone!!! No!!!" screamed Darlene's mother.

Her picture was set up in the school hallways.

People were crushed for weeks.

Alright, I'm not going to keep writing more parts if I don't get any comments lol. well rate and comment please, thx!!!

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On September 25th 2007 killerkid33 Said :
killerkid33 Thats really good!!!! I liked it and Yes i want you to write another part. Thats why i comment lol
On September 22nd 2007 pnkchc06 Said :
pnkchc06 I like it! Very Good!