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The Cellphone

Fiction Created on 2-16-07 Views(209) Story Rating G

“Hello?” Aaron answered the phone, but there was no voice on the other end. “Hello is someone there?” He paused for a moment longer before giving up and ending the call.Aaron swiped his wallet and keys from his dresser and walked down the hallway into the living room, where his mom was sitting on the couch watching TV.

“Mom, I’m going to go hang out with some friends for a while, so I’ll be back before curfew.” said Aaron as he made his way towards the front door.

“Not so fast. Report cards came in the mail today. Two Ds and an F aren’t good enough to get you out of the house on a Friday night. You can either have your friends come here, or march right back into your room and spend the rest of the night studying.” “But it’s not fair. You said just yesterday I could go. We were going to go to a movie tonight. The new Halloween movie is coming out today.”“That was before. Besides, you know how I hate it when you go to those horror movies: all that blood and such. No, I want you safe and sound right here at home.”“Fine.” Sighed Aaron angrily. “I’ll call Derek and Ashley to see if they want to come over.”He flipped open his phone and speed dialed Mark.“Hey, Mark? How about we forget the movie tonight and just hang out at my house?...We can watch movies, or something. I do have that big screen TV in my basement…I know…We can see Halloween 4 another night…Yeah, Ok…Oh, and Mark?...Can you call Ashley to let her know what’s going on?...Great. See you in a few minutes.” Aaron closed his phone and slipped it back into his pocket. “Are you satisfied now?”“Yes, very.” Replied his mother. She stared him down for a moment, and then started towards the kitchen. “I’ll be in here baking. If you need anything just call.”“Sure, Mom.” Aaron sarcastically said as he walked over to the living room couch to wait for his friends.In a few minutes, Mark and Ashley arrived and they moved into the basement to watch a movie. After some deliberation, they finally decided on The Babysitter.Aaron began to get so into the film, when his phone rang he nearly jumped off the couch.“Hello?” No answer. “Hello?” Frustrated, he pressed the end button on his phone and set it on the arm of the couch.“Who you calling?” Mark asked.“I don’t know, wrong number, I guess.”Mark gave him a look.“Well, I’m going to go get something to drink.” Ashley said as she stood up. Mark also rose to his feet, declaring, “I’ll get a drink also. You want anything, Aaron?”“No. You want me to stop the movie while you two are gone?”“That’s ok. We’ve seen this one before.”Mark and Ashley went upstairs, leaving Aaron alone with the TV to keep him company. In the movie, the phone rang, and the girl answered it, terror in her voice. Just as the killer began to speak, Aaron’s phone began to ring again. He answered it, beginning to get annoyed with the prank caller.“Hello?...Who are you?...Answer me!” Then an answer. “What do you mean?...No…Leave us alone.” Then the caller hung up. Aaron sat on the couch, suddenly unsure of his surroundings.Mark came down the stairs, drink in hand. “Hey man, you look kind of pale. Are you ok?”Aaron paused, and then looked at Mark. “Yeah, I got a prank call. It’s nothing.”“What’d they say?”“He said…he said he wanted me dead. I don’t know who it was. At first I thought it might be you, but your number would have come up on my phone, and this was a private number.”“Stop kidding, Aaron.” Said Mark, laughing, but when Aaron remained silent he realized he was serious. “I’ll go get Ashley, I’ll be right back.” Mark ran up the stairs.Aaron looked around his surroundings. Some movement in the corner caught his eye, and he stared it down. Out of the darkness a face materialized, and then a body. It was the man from the phone. He wanted to shout out, but the scream couldn’t leave his mouth. The man pulled out a phone, and it looked eerily similar to Aaron’s. He dropped the phone open onto the couch and then, grinning, the man covered Aaron’s nose and mouth with his hand. He struggled, but couldn’t escape the iron grip. Just when spots began to form in his vision and he knew he was close to passing out, Mark and Ashley came down the stairs.“Aaron!” screamed Ashley. “What are you doing? Are you trying to kill yourself?”Aaron sat on the couch alone, his mouth over his hand, fear engulfing his eyes. Mark pulled his hand from his mouth, and with a heaving gasp, Aaron collapsed into the couch.“You saved me.” Aaron scanned the room; sure the man would reappear in any moment. “We have to get out of here. The man is still here.”“What are you talking about?” Demanded Mark. But he didn’t listen. Aaron leapt from the couch and ran up the stairs. Mark ran after him, but Ashley stayed behind.She noticed the cell phone resting on the couch, and reached down to retrieve it. Looking at the screen she realized the phone was out of batteries: it was dead.

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On January 6th 2008 ThisIsTheDay Said :
ThisIsTheDay This is really good, but I agree with Chris-something is missing. However, I enjoieddd it. ^^ -Lozer =3
On June 29th 2007 ray7chel Said :
ray7chel i dont get the end...the man's phone was out of batteries, or his?:S and was the man real?? good story though.,
On April 22nd 2007 glamourgore Said :
glamourgore Hmmm, interesting. I am not sure how I feel about the ending though.
On April 22nd 2007 glamourgore Said :
glamourgore Hmmm, interesting. I am not sure how I feel about the ending though.
On March 30th 2007 lilbloodawni Said :
lilbloodawni I like this, but agree that the ending needs work. Not a sequel as such, but maybe just a bit of rearranging or careful adding of a little bit extra information. For instance.. how does he know that the man in the room is the one from the 'phone? I can cite more examples if you want, just let me know. The only other big thing this needs is a bit of editation, and this ties back in with the things noted earlier, too.
On March 25th 2007 synysterlove22 Said :
synysterlove22 i like suspensful stories. and that was one of them. I enjoyed it a lot.
On March 9th 2007 LokiSeto Said :
LokiSeto I don't know but there just seems something missing from this. It is good but... hmmm... If I can think of it later I'll tell you.
On February 20th 2007 satinmystique Said :
satinmystique It is a REALLY good story, but I agree with the other person who say's it ends kind of abruptly. Kind of a cliff hanger type ending, deffinately needs a sequel! You're a good writer.
On February 18th 2007 princessbaby2 Said :
princessbaby2 well i can say that you are a better writer than i am but i think you should continue the story on. you are an excellent writer.
On February 18th 2007 ofloveandblood Said :
ofloveandblood Hmm very interesting! You're very good with your words and as with all your writing, the story flows along beautifully. I can't help but feel the story ends kind of abruptly. Is that how it ends or is this beginning to a new series?
On February 16th 2007 onaipwolf Said :
onaipwolf Yeah. I changed his name at the last moment...I must have missed that one.
On February 16th 2007 Bgurl13 Said :
Bgurl13 That's really good. But where it says "I’ll call Derek and Ashley to see if they want to come over.”He flipped open his phone and speed dialed Mark." should Derek be Mark? Your writing is beautiful.