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Do you Hate Me? |
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Trepidation |
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Walmart Insanity |
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Suspended (part 9) |
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The Marker. |
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Unwelcome Change |
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Late Night Decisions |
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Suspended |
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Trails of Blood |
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The Beginning... |
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I run through the woods, the trees and brambles tearing at my clothing. The fear rises into my heart, I can’t stand it anymore. I scream in terror as the culmination of my fears reaches out and grasps onto my flailing arm. The grip is like iron. I attempt to pull away from the horrible creature, but my fate is sealed and I cannot escape. The hot, rancid breath of the monster fills my face as it pulls me closer. I try to pull away again, but slip on some leaves and fall down a steep incline. For a moment I hope that I may have escaped, but the creature’s hand grips my arm and we tumble down the hill.
As we reach the bottom of the hill, I land hard on my back. The creature’s face is looming over me, and I can see the complete confidence in the emerald eyes gazing at my face. I spy a hunting knife in the left hand and I scream once again as I now realize this monster’s true intent. I cry for mercy, but I know, as this creature does, that it is but vain pleadings. As the creature lifts the blade to bring it down into my chest, I realize my arm is free and I roll just before the knife plunges down. It strikes a rock, causing sparks to fly into the air for a moment before dissipating into the inky blackness of the night. I quickly pick myself up and began running again, knowing that the monster is right behind me, knowing that I am far from safety.
Suddenly I hear a shot ring out and glance behind myself hoping that some local hunter has destroyed this beast, but it is I who was struck. As I fall to the ground, blood pouring from the wound in my back, I wait for several moments for the creature to come and finish the destruction of my body, but the forest is silent. Daring to hope again, I decide to look around. Pain washes over me as I push myself into a sitting position with the use of my scratched and bloodied arms. My breath comes in short bursts and I fear that I have a punctured lung.
I search around, but I cannot find the creature anywhere. The bushes next to me move and I am pulled backwards into them. I scream again in pain and fear as the world fades into blissful blackness.
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| On August 17th 2007 Artemisseven Said : | |
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Awesome. |
| On July 16th 2007 brokenwing3 Said : | |
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awesome! |
| On April 22nd 2007 glamourgore Said : | |
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I like how I feel that I am the charecter. Well written. |
| On March 21st 2007 starblaze88 Said : | |
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very good details i was hoping it was alittle longer but good thanks for commenting mine!
dana |
| On March 17th 2007 dolphingrl103 Said : | |
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wow great discription |
| On February 2nd 2007 Loopylu999 Said : | |
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Wow, very very very good, I felt like I was there. |
| On January 29th 2007 CHICKA6789 Said : | |
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This is really good, very intense. |
| On January 29th 2007 LokiSeto Said : | |
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You have a great understanding of grammer and words. The only thing you have left to master from this peice is to captivate the audience. Try to decripe more of the fear "you" feel. And the beginning needs a little work to actually introduce everything. |
| On January 27th 2007 FallOutDay Said : | |
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Nice, it's very dramatic and you have great grammmar skills. lol |


