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Theadore's Man.....My Dream Man

Romance Created on 8-7-07 Views(177) Story Rating G

Can u believe my mother would name me Kennedy….I mean come on!! Why would my mom name me after a dead president….Don’t get me wrong…its not as bad as my sister ..my dad chose her name to be Theadore ..But most people call her Teddy. Yea I know ur thinking “Wat kind of Psychotic parents would name their kids after dead presidents..” Well.. that would be my parents. But wen u forget about the dead president part….my names not so bad….but wen u think about my sisters name without the dead president part it just sounds like she’s and eight year olds Teddy bear…But she doesn’t seem to mind.

Wen u look at me I just look like an all-american 16 year old girl……Brown hair a little past my shoulders…Green eyes..5’6 and a fairly slender shape….yes….I have hips..and I don’t starve myself like those super models that look like they just got dug up from a grave…..no way!! That is NOT healthy… but anyway….I’m not normal…and the reason I am not normal is because I am 16 years old and have never had a boyfriend and I have never had a real first kiss. I don’t count this stupid little 4 second lip- lock experience I had wen I was 11 with Railen Margon at a summer camp one year…(ick….his breath smelled like the brownies we had had for desert that day)……I do have my eye on someone….the problem is that someone is non only that…..(Drumroll…….) MY SISTERS BOYFRIEND…..Yea….u heard me right…I have a major crush on my 19 year old Blond haired blue eyed 5’8 model skinny sister. don’t get me wrong…she may be model skinny but she is also model gorgeous…..

And me…yea …not so gorgeous…I mean …I don’t look like a dog or anything…actually I think im kind of pretty….and so do some guys at my school…a couple of which are pretty cute….but none that look like my dream man that has Long Black hair …Blue eyes that I could lose myself in and a long lean bod (abs would be OK ..but not a have to have…I just don’t want some flabby bod on my bf) to go along with his Confident and cool personality…O yea…and he has to be funny sweet.. And treat my friends and family with respect…and a gentlemen…. But the problem with me having this guy….is I just practically described my sisters 17 year old boyfriend Bryce Lasterfom (yea I know weird last name)…..But he has the long lean body…and with a very cute smile that could brighten even the darkest room….. Wow!! This isn’t good!!

 

 

 

 

This is my first time EVER writing....but i read ALOT....so pleez tell me if this is good and if i should write more on thsi story, start another story....or just give up writing altogether.....Thanx =)

 

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On September 7th 2007 wannahug13 Said :
wannahug13 =3 =3 =3
On August 27th 2007 paramore549 Said :
paramore549 keep writing. i like it.
On August 9th 2007 Hellcro Said :
Hellcro Every wonderful thing has to start somewhere. My only advice...keep writing. =D
On August 8th 2007 jirrith2007 Said :
jirrith2007 This is cute. I can relate with this character. I'm 17, and going off to college, and I've never had a boyfriend either. I believe that Cassie and the person above her already gave you great advice. Keep me posted please!
On August 8th 2007 lalaloca2 Said :
lalaloca2 this is pretty cool! plz keep me posted!
On August 8th 2007 oreoash Said :
oreoash Few things! its okay to use the "..." but not that much, lol. Also there is one part, like Cassie said, it sounds like she has a crush on her sister. Also, i dont like that font, hehe...hurts me eyes. Besides that, i really cant believe this is your first time. I really liked it. the odd names (that are guys names) added a little fun. This idea is good.
On August 7th 2007 xxcassiejayxx Said :
xxcassiejayxx Don't give up writing,I want to read more. If you want tips I have a few but don't take offense to anything I say, I'm just trying to help okay? First one, try spell check. It always helps. And end each sentence with one dot instead of three, that just makes for a bunch of very long sentences. The other thing is in the second paragraph it sounds like she has a crush on her sister, not her boyfriend. Other than those few things great job for a first story, and make sure to tell me when you write more!
On August 7th 2007 ybeth09 Said :
ybeth09 good intro!! i think u should keep writing more to this story =]
On August 7th 2007 twilight023 Said :
twilight023 this is pretty good im wondering were your going to tak this though.