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The Last Line (chapter 2 prt 1 )

Epic Created on 2-1-08 Views(58) Story Rating G

Confusion and chaos resonated inside of me,

as well as out.

Food touched my lips.

Like a sick joke,

As the first morsel of food entered my hungry mouth, the rest of it was blown out of reach.

The table in front of me shattered to splinters.

warnings sounded throughout the camp.

For a moment I could hear nothing.

Men shouting, running feet, the clank of armor..

It all sounded the same.

The tent was starting to cave.

I started to go for the back entrance.

As I ran sound returned to me.

It was then that I realized how close harm truly was.

As I rounded the corner of my exit,

I only made it so far.

Something knocked me to my knees.

I bit my lip to keep from crying out.

While kneeling,

I watched in horror as hell seemed to rear.

My vision blurred.

From the black smoke or tears,

I couldn’t tell.

Left and right, I could see men dieing

Crying out for someone who wasn’t there-

But some days away from here.

Ambush and slaughter. that’s how they win a war?

This is the last line. There were no other soldiers to fight

My blood ran cold as a saw something that only ever happened in my nightmares.

My father had seen me and was running for me

I watched in horror as someone from behind cut him down

The world broke in that second

Inside and out,

I was shattered.

I cried out in agony and anger

I felt as if I could befall the walls of heaven

And freeze the gates of hell.

So, in the very same moment

My father and home disappeared.

Lost forever.

With this realization,

My world faded to black.

Nothing.

 

 

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On February 4th 2008 necrosiss Said :
necrosiss your story is quite different. your writing style is interesting.
On February 3rd 2008 joshmyers112 Said :
joshmyers112 thats the second story i wasnt expecting to be like that. good story tho
On February 1st 2008 tkotapout Said :
tkotapout whoa!totally cool! like WHOA! and well written. me loves it!!