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Our Last Night Together
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We sat upon rooftops and gazed down at the burning headlights. We would talk and laugh, drink and smoke, yet all the while I was lost inside the neon that reflected from your eyes. Thre were hundreds of people that would come and go through the years, but to me it was always me and you, no one else. You're the reason I spent my nights there. We were so young, so innocent, and so in love.
"Do you think things will ever change?" you asked me the last night we ever spent together.
"Nothing ever changes," I replied as I took another drag.
"No, I mean with me and you.Everybody here. We'll be graduating soon, and most of them will be going to college or moving away. I wonder what it will be life after that," you wondered aloud.
"I don't know. I'll still be here. What about you?"
"I don't know."
A beer bottle smashed right next to us, and the rest of the group that was still awake came over to the edge of the roof where you and I sat.
"What are you two doin' over here by yourselves?" Aaron asked with a big grin.
"Just talking,"you told him.
He nudged me with his foot."If you ain't goin' to pull any moves her soon, I'm goin' to have to move in and show you how it's done!"
I gave him a wink as I stood up and blew my cigarette smoke in his face."Don't worry about it, man, you could't get any from a girl even if you paid her, bro."
The others in the crowd laughed, and Aaron proceeded to put his arm around you. You dodged him and laughed as well."He isn't lying, you know."
He shook his head and grinned again."Fuck all you guys, I'm goin' home to put my drunk ass to sleep."And with that he stumbled down the stairway.
"And another one down," Just spoke of the group that had now slowly dwindled to seven over the night.
He took a seat on top of an AC unit and began to play his acoustic guitar.Everyone but you and I driftted in his direction, we stayed at the edge of the rooftop gazing across the city.
"It's cold out tonight," you announced as you scooted next to me, and my arm fell around your shoulder."When are you going to try and kiss me, really?"
You looked up at me with asking eyes, and I felt my heart skip a beat. I had loved you from the moment you came to town, a little over five years ago, and we'd always been close, but for some reason I never tried for more. Tonight was the night everything changed. Our lips met and then our tongues, and nothing else in the world mattered as long as I had you. Somehow I'm sure you felt the same.
We ended the kiss followed by hoots and hollers from everybody, and our faces could return nothing but child like smiles.
"You want to get out of here?"I offered.
"Sure," you answered.
We told everyone goodbye for the night, and headed down the stairway. Your house was only a few blocks from the spot, and I walked you home, my stomach doing flips the whole way.
"My dads going to be pissed I was out so late again," you said as we drew closer.
"I swear to God I will kill him if he hits you again,"I declared.
"I'll be okay,"you assured me.
Your father had always been abusive, and it only seemed to be getting worse with time. I'd always wanted to do something about it, but I didnt't know what. You didn't want the police involved, because you didnt want anyone to know.
We walked the final block insilence until we reached your doorstep. I leaned to steal another kiss before we said goodnight.
"Let's go out on a real date tomorrow. We can do whatever you want to," I proposed.
You smiled that gorgeous smile and held me close."I've always wanted to spend the day at the beach, and have a picnic at night by candlelight."
"Okay. Then that's what we'll do. I'll call you in the morning."
We shared one last kiss before you crept inside, and I think that was the best night of my life.
The following morning I had everything prepared to give you the best day of your life, and what I was sure would be mine also. I was just about to pick up the phone to call you when it rang.
"Hello?"
"Dude..." came Aarons voice from the other end.
"Yeah?"
"I don't know how to tell you this, but...Kara,man. I was goin' by her house 'cause I heart about you and her hittin' it off last night...The cops were there..."
"What? What hell's going on there?!"
I heard him take a deep breath, "I guess that her and her dad got in a fight last night, and he hit her, or somethin'...It was bad enough to give her internal bleeding...she's dead, man..."
I tried to say something, but the words wouldn't come. I hung up the phone and stumbled back, trying to get my thoughts cleared out. I was literally sick from the grief that overcame me in a matter of seconds, and I didn't come out of the house the rest of the day. Nor did I eat or drink anything.My parents tried to comfort me, the phone rang off the hook, but I didn't speak. I glanced countless times at the bag of stuff I had prepared for our "perfect day", and decided to leave it packed. Maybe this was all a dream, I thought.
But the day turned to night and nothing changed.
At 3am I popped open my bedroom window and made the longest walk to the rooftop ever. I came to the spot we'd always sat and took a knee. Tears flowed uncontrollably and I thought of stepping off the edge, yet I knew I didn't have the guts. Instead I spent hours remembering everything we ever did, every word you ever spoke, up until the last time I saw you.
"Things will change more than you ever could have known, love..."
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| On September 3rd 2008 atavanhalen Said : | |
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I love short stories like this, the kind that just make you imagine what could happen and what might happen and then take you through an unexpected turn and put you through so many emotions so quickly. It tugs at the heart in more than one way and that's a sign of someone who could grow to be a very very brillant writer. |
| On December 7th 2007 ybeth09 Said : | |
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im tearing!!! very good story! you did a great job putting this idea into words. =]
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| On October 30th 2007 JessicaKasza Said : | |
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well written. good short story. suspense. I rather enjoyed it. |
| On October 11th 2007 onaipwolf Said : | |
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Well-written. Sad and touching. |
| On October 10th 2007 AlBobby Said : | |
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Wow...I'm speachless. O_o |
| On October 7th 2007 Babydotz Said : | |
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Aww very touching.. Not many things make me think like this it was very sad but a very good story! Keep me posted on any others you write. I would love to read them! |
| On October 7th 2007 EvilRaven9892 Said : | |
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Oh wow that brought tears to my eyes. That was brilliant!
I hate it when that happens.
innocent people getting hurt because assholes like that take their anger out the wrong way. |
| On October 6th 2007 teekluvchloe Said : | |
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this is markie...i liked it soo much its so sad but really good!!! i love you chris :] |
| On October 4th 2007 teekluvchloe Said : | |
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i love it almost made me cry :( love ya |
| On October 4th 2007 Jumpy1811 Said : | |
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Soo good you gave me goosebumps. Good job! |
| On October 4th 2007 101091 Said : | |
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Sad but really good. I like it. |
| On October 3rd 2007 blondemoment22 Said : | |
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oh my gosh. I'm gonna cry. I've never been one for stories with "you" in them, but this was good. |
| On October 3rd 2007 BabyKryptonite Said : | |
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this is a bitter-sweet story i love it it amazing! good work . . .. your gonna make me cry lol |
| On October 3rd 2007 spazzattacks76 Said : | |
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Aw man, I have tears sitting in the corner of my eyes. I am crying now. This was beautiful. I really felt like I was there, part of the story. Amazing. Breathtakingly wonderful. |
| On October 3rd 2007 monkeydee22 Said : | |
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I'm in tears! Very good writing, in that short amount of writing you connected, made us care about the characters, and put a twist. Very very good. I agree keep writing!
~Vampyr~ |
| On October 3rd 2007 pnkchc06 Said : | |
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I love it! |
| On October 3rd 2007 JessicaLinn90 Said : | |
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This was really good. I cried though but it was so good. =] |
| On October 3rd 2007 fallenbloodxxx Said : | |
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omg. one of my fave stories on this site.. i wonder how he turns out.. i love it though its sad. |
| On October 3rd 2007 betterthanboyz Said : | |
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this is a good story, is it fact or fiction? |
| On October 3rd 2007 JWalker2406 Said : | |
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This was great!! I had a feeling that her dad was going to do something to her....Bless his heart!! His perfect day is now his worst nightmare! Let me know when more is up!! :D |
| On October 3rd 2007 omfg010203 Said : | |
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omg....umm..ok...this made me cry....gawd...it was really good, but sooo sad, i don't know how people could live if this happened to them.. |
| On October 3rd 2007 XtranquillityX Said : | |
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Amazing! Uplifting and sad all at the same time. Very nicley written as well. Keep it up! |
| On October 3rd 2007 jirrith2007 Said : | |
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HOW SAD!!! awww... :( |
| On October 3rd 2007 foxridergirl09 Said : | |
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u made me cry in school too!!!! everyone is askin me wats wrong |
| On October 3rd 2007 Darkrose3 Said : | |
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Wow!!! Oh my god that is so sad and yet at the greatest moment of happiness something happens that changes it. I know bc it has happened to me before. Good sob story |


