Still a little too predictable
Forest scene is under develop and lacks your skill at writing action
I have also noticed that your sentence sentence structures are getting a better blah. Try using more words that end -ing. This tends to fix the issue.
This stories still better then 95% better then the crap on the internet, so way to go.
Created on 12-31-69
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Still a little too predictable
Forest scene is under develop and lacks your skill at writing action
I have also noticed that your sentence sentence structures are getting a better blah. Try using more words that end -ing. This tends to fix the issue.
This stories still better then 95% better then the crap on the internet, so way to go.