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A Good Nightmare (Ch.2)
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 Created on 1-1-08
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Sorry its so short and for all the misspelling.
He was the most beautiful man I had ever seen. He had really dark hair, a strong square jaw, and sea blue eyes. His shirt was streched tight over his bulging muscles. His skin was the only flaw in his looks. It was so white that it seemed to make the snow look gray and shined so well in the sunlight that it putt the sun to shame.
“Help me,” I feebly cried.
He reached down and picked me up like a baby and whispered something I couldn’t hear. Everthing started to flash by too fast. Maybe I am dreaming, I thought to myself.
As he was running, I suddenly felt jults of pain going through my entire body. My voice finly came back to me and I screamed out in pain. I could feel everthing now. I was freezing and my fingers and toes were starting to turn blue. There were gashes and cuts covering my intier body form which my blood was slowly oozing out.
The edges of my vision were starting to turn black and my screaming to cease as my body started to shut down to protect its self form the pain. Then I slowly started to loose concessness. The last thing I remembered was him saying, “Hold,you’ll be ok” and the coldness of his skin.Comments
Please Login to post comments| On February 28th 2008 DavidSchomburg Said : | |
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it's alright... i guess |
| On February 9th 2008 individulsong Said : | |
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something to think about when you're writing, write how a character feels about seeing "the most beautiful man"...I know you talk about what he looks like, which is great, but your narrator should also talk about what the feeling was in that exact moment. |
| On January 2nd 2008 angelofpurity5 Said : | |
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a little short but really good |
| On January 1st 2008 z3r0p3rc3nt Said : | |
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i like it |
| On January 1st 2008 tearra14 Said : | |
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good story. try to write a bit more k? KMP-Keep Me Posted |
