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| On February 3rd 2008 horrorqueenusa Said : | |
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ummm, its got an ok storyline, but some tips. quotation work better and maybe a little longer with more info like why her arm was bloody and how her dad died. another thing with john how he says, "sorry didnt mean to be right here when you came out" im sorry but thats not good. other then that its really good but those are some tips. (PLEASE DONT HATE ME!) |


