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Created on 12-31-69

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On August 17th 2008 TidalNight Said :

	Very much enjoyable. Congrats again on getting it published.

On August 17th 2008 CharTheKnight Said :

	Incredible irony...and I'm not normally one for cliches, but was excellent! Of course the format could use a lil work but you're getting published! Congrats!

On April 6th 2008 sirreal Said :

	you don't have to apologize about your formatting. it was made by humans, it can be unmade by a human as well. ;]. good job btw. cheers.

On March 17th 2008 october1015 Said :

	I absolutely loved it, I was very captivated, but I wanted more detail as to how she killed herself. That's all you needed; more detail. Not much was left for the mind to ponder. As in, I pictured everything in black and white, without color. Good job, tho'.

On March 17th 2008 madmarcus Said :

	top notch. almost like hitchcock with a touch more human element. The ending was perfect. I think the begining was a lil weak being the only critisism I can give. I suggest continue with the theme and symbolism of the apple for the opener. something that grabs you. Maybe mention how the apples were just ripening on the trees as he had to go to a fueneral and how the juxtaposition didn't sit well with him? maybe.

On March 17th 2008 jac41190 Said :

	sorry about the formatting, or lack there of... it never works quite right on my computer for some reason