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the goth house part 2
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Tom heard the messige he yelled NOO.tom ran to put on hes soft green swaeter .and he ran out side he ran as fast as he could to the scary goth house he saw 3 broken windows .then he saw a door he open it.he went up the staris.man this sound old like 100000 years old!when he was done going up the creepy old staris.he saw a door he opened it when he opened it he screamed AHHHHHHHHHHHHH.LOUND! he scream be cause there was a old lady who was hagging herslef. he face was truning black and blue and red.all most withe. so tom took her out of there.but she did not want out so she got back in.so tom went out of that room and went in the hall.he saw other door he opened it. it was so dark no body could ever ever see in here.tom walk in he feelt something touch his back.he turn aroud and there was toms mom hagging with her blood droping DRIP DRIP DRIP DRIP DRIP DRIP.tom cryed yelled smashed all kinds of things in that room.matt could hear him from hes house. so matt ran as fast as he could.to the goth house! when he went in the house matt yelled TOM.HLEP MATT HLEP MATT said tom in sad voice.im comeing said matt.matt ran as fast as he could to the dark room .when he got there he oh my god your moms dead i know im crying to . tom we got to get out of here. NO I CANT I LOVE MY MOM HE SAID IN A SAD VOICE .YES YOU CAN SAID MATT.NO matt grabed tom by the arm.when they got out of they went to matts house.mom said matt as he ran in the house.what dear said matts mom tammy .toms mom is dead.oh my im so srry tom how?tom went in the goth house and he went in a dark room then feelt someone touch him!he trund around and there was toms mom hagging on a rope bloode driping srip srip DRIP! oh my pepol die all time there to .im going to call the cops said tammy.199.hellow hi my sons freind tom harson went to the goth house .and he went in a dark room and feelt someone touch him he trund around and there was hes mom hagging on a rope with her blood driping.OH MY GOSH.said the cops with be there in a hurry !!. thank you as tammy hanged up the phone . its ok tom said tammy the cops said they well be here in a hurry.then ban BAN BAN BAN BANABN BAN BAN.on the door tammy opened the door it was the cops.hellow were is this goth house.me and tom will show you said matt.ok.here it is said tom.wow it looks preety creepy and gothic house ewwwww.said the cop.but the cop went in tom and matt waited out side .as the cop went in house he went up the creep y old old staris.MAN this staris are so old said the cop.then the cop went to the dark room. and looked around he feelt something touch him the cop turnd around .and yelled HOLLY!.the cop took his cell phone and said we have a dead womon her i need pepol here.soon all the cops were here fire peeps all of them.tom and matt stared to cry tom cryed the most. toms mom went to the hospatill tom and matt were in the waiting room the dockter can in and said im srry but she did not make it she is dead .WHAT? YELLED TOM.im srry. TOM RAN OUT OF THE HOSSPATIL .TO MATTS HOME.whats rong said tammy MY MOM DID NOT MAKE IT AS TOM CRYED CRYED CRYED AND CRYED.its ok said tammy.matt can runing in house .im so srry tom said matt.We have to barrie her and make a funral. so they had a funral.tom cryedhes eyes out.matt was santding besaided him.when it was done tom told matt he was the best freind he ever had!. the end
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| On May 24th 2008 kristine1246 Said : | |
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I think this story was okay. I wouldn't consider it one of the best things I've read, but its okay.
Theres a few things I noticed though,
~Your writing style is really cramped.
~Everything needs to be spaced out more
~You should make sure to check your spelling so that your writing makes more sense.
Other then that, it wasn't horrible to read.
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| On May 24th 2008 gusty13 Said : | |
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that was really good |
| On May 23rd 2008 hott555555555 Said : | |
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the end this is a story i made its so sad its part 2 of part 1 |


