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Eluding Danger (Chapter 1)
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I was being dragged deep into the dark, eerie woods. Suddenly, we stopped outside of a small, uninviting hut. The mysterious man pulled me through the front door. Though the outside of the hut was horrible, the inside was a little nicer: there was a kitchen, a bed, and a few other run-down pieces of furniture. It seemed as thought the man had been inhabiting this area for quite a while. I was too busy taking in my surroundings to notice that the man had loosened his grip on my arms, but I snapped back into reality when he grunted. I looked at him, an expression of terror on my face.
"Do not be afraid," the man said in a very low, demonic voice. I tried to reply, but nothing came out. It seemed as if there was an invisible piece of tape covering my mouth. He took a few menacing steps closer to me. I could hardly breathe, let alone think, when he stopped about a foot away from my helpless body.
"Don't kill me!" I managed to squeak.
"I wasn't planning on it," he said. "I was really planning to help you. I've been keeping an eye on you for a while, and I knew that when you ran away I should seize the chance to help you. Please, don;t fear me."
"Who are you?" I asked in a slightly more relaxed voice.
"I'm Dan Crowder, a former FBI agent," he told me in relieved voice.
"Former?" I echoed. "What do you mean by 'former'?"
"Well," he sighed, "I once worked with the FBI to help children who are in your situation, but while I was watching after a young girl in my care about three years ago, she vanished. She was never heard from again, so most of us believe that the mother found her and took her back."
"So a girl vanished while in your care, and you still expect me to trust you, a total stranger?"I shouted.
"Why won't you? I know who you are, and I know everything about you, Elizabeth Baker," he said. An eerie silence filled the room.
"How do you know my name?" I asked in a voice that was barely more than a whisper.
"That doesn't matter, Elizabeth," he said, "all you need to know is that you are the chosen one."
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| On June 6th 2008 hardxcorexprep Said : | |
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stalker awsome |
| On March 26th 2008 alycecrist Said : | |
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STALKER!!! haha its great. So....many...big...words *twitch* |
| On February 23rd 2008 Pinkgrl5906 Said : | |
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very good, just watch when ur typing u gell letters mixed in and stuff....the last part that said "u r the chosen 1" that kinda reminds me of buffy the vampire slayer...lol... |
| On February 16th 2008 DanteH Said : | |
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ooh, must read the second chapter!!! |
| On February 12th 2008 angiegymgurl Said : | |
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ooooo! very good! love it! |
| On February 11th 2008 surefirefailur Said : | |
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Much better! Much, much better! The pacing and the flow have been improved, and you spelled everything right and remembered your commas. Great job! I eagerly await the next installment. |
| On February 11th 2008 hondaslayer Said : | |
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nice i like it. Cliffhangers after every chapter rock lol |
| On February 11th 2008 chickp96 Said : | |
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omg.. awesome.. |
| On February 10th 2008 goosebumpgirl1 Said : | |
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please keep me posted |
| On February 10th 2008 Bianca1236 Said : | |
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holy hell that was pretty good,
is there another chapter....there better b that was pretty damn good! |
| On February 10th 2008 xxXrareloveXx Said : | |
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i like it....kmp! |
| On February 10th 2008 yeahmankl1com Said : | |
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hey good story i liked it but it was a little short but keep writing and keep me posted |


