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A Story of One Syllables
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 Created on 1-11-08
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When she was a girl, it was all she dreamed of. Now she tried to be free of that but was to scared to be left on her own. Still, her heart kept beat to a drum no one else could hear. She looked into his eyes and saw that he was scared. He was, in fact, just as scared as she. As if she would say no. Of course she could not say no to him, for there was more love in his eyes than fear. It pushed the fear out of him and tugged at her own. She loved him as well, but she loved her dreams just as much.
He tried to stop the shake in his hand as he held out the ring he had put so much faith in. His heart stopped as she gave a small smile and held out her hand. He laughed and slipped the ring on her hand where those sorts of rings ought to be. He saw the fear leave her eyes. He did not see it leave her heart.
She went out with joy to greet her life-to-be, but her heart stayed behind for a bit to bid her dreams a soft fare-thee-well. She could see her paints and chalks fade to the toys and clothes of a child; her inks drew a quaint white house with a quaint white fence. He would not see the last thing she would paint; a lone girl on a sea of red.
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Please Login to post comments| On March 30th 2008 numbbbb0z Said : | |
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Loved the first 3 comments of this, by the way |
| On March 30th 2008 numbbbb0z Said : | |
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It is sad when you read it several times - perhaps you should've emphasized the importance of her dreams and what it meant to her with more than what was said. I like it. Don't know why. I can relate to the dreams and pushing them aside for love..Sea of red...Perhaps a sequel/part two of the story? I can really seeing this being a 10-paged story of sorts. Maybe a prelude to how they met, what her dreams were of the sorts, this has all kinds of different directions to take..I like the possibilities :) |
| On March 20th 2008 cassiegiraffe Said : | |
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everyone always reads it the wrong way though. they all say "aww, it's so sweet!", and i'm like, "how is that sweet? she does gave up her dreams to go pop out some babies!" but hey, it's all about interpretation. |
| On March 18th 2008 RalRasper Said : | |
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I really think that story is good, short and too the point, i am sure a lot of people can identify with it.
He saw fear leave her eyes but not her heart, so very true. |
| On March 8th 2008 genericuser100 Said : | |
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Sometimes the best thing to say is nothing at all. |
| On March 8th 2008 genericuser100 Said : | |
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If only we all used less complicated words. Do you think she made the right choice?
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| On January 24th 2008 cassiegiraffe Said : | |
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a comment or two would be nice. |
| On January 24th 2008 cassiegiraffe Said : | |
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seriously. |
| On January 15th 2008 cassiegiraffe Said : | |
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someone really should comment this |
