Happy Birthday (Revised and Edited)

Ok, so I took a creative writing class and I decided to write my Happy Birthday Roxy story. But it got majorly edited and is missing a few parts. I already had 8 pages double spaced so I couldn't add some of the other parts.

So here it is:

It’s twilight. The sun is setting on the ocean and the behind it the moon is rising. Above there are only a few clouds in the sky. Behind the clouds there are only a few visible stars. There is a pretty big boat in the ocean. Not far away from the shore. You could still see the beautiful beach houses and the few people still on the beach watching the sun set. When you look the other way you can see a small island. Well, at least it looks small from where you are. But when  you looked harder you could see that it is actually pretty big. You are in the Long Island Sound.

            Scarlet’s long brown hair was being blown over the edge of the boat by the wind. She was watching the waves and fish over the edge of the boat. Some great party this turned out to be.    

Today was her 14^th  birthday and her parents decided to throw her a party on the family boat. But she knew no one at her party. They were all old. “Her” guests where her parents’ co-workers. So she sat staring into the water waiting for the party to be over.

As she was staring over the edge of the boat thinking about her horrible birthday party she saw something bigger than a fish in the water. It kind of looked like a person. What was THAT? She thought. Looking around the spot where she saw it trying to find it again, she found nothing.

I’m so bored I’m starting to see things now. Jeez. She thought to herself.

 She heard her parent’s screams and looked up to see the other side of the boat was starting to rise into the air! It kept going up and up and up until it was straight up in the air. Then everyone was falling into the water. Scarlet was pushed under the water with the boat. She fought to get to the surface but she couldn’t see or tell which way was up or down. For all she knew she could be going down farther.

Her lungs were gasping for air. Everything started getting darker. Oh no! I’m going to die! Was Scarlet’s last thought. And then everything then went black.

            So this is where you go after you die? Was what Scarlet first thought when she woke up. She didn’t remember what happened, but she remembered that she thought she was going to die.

            She sat up and looked around. She was in a plain bed and a few yards away was another bed that looked like the one she was in. There were four walls that were a dull pink. There were a few spots where the pain started chipping.  There were 2 small desks across from each of the beds. At one of the desks was a girl with long blonde hair.

 “This doesn’t look like heaven.” Scarlet thought aloud. She was really confused.

The girl from the desk turned around. “This isn’t heaven. You’re not even dead.”

Scarlet gave a confused look. “Then where am I? And who are you?”

“I’m Rosalie. And I’m not really sure where we are. I guess-“

Rosalie was interrupted by the room door being opened. A tall lady walked in. When she saw Scarlet sitting up on the bed a big smile appeared on her face. “Oh Scarlet! You’re awake!”

“Uh…Yeah…How do you know my name?” Scarlet said.

“It doesn’t matter. You must be thirsty! I’m going to go get you something to drink!” With that the lady walked out of the room.

“Wow…looks like someone is on happy pills…” Scarlet said to Rosalie.

“Yeah. Totally.”

Scarlet just sat on her bed waiting for the weird lady to come back. When all of the previous events hit her like a ton of bricks. She remembered the boring party, the boat flipping and then blacking out. She shouldn’t be here after that. She should be at home or a hospital or something. Not at some strange place with an overly happy lady.

 5 minutes later the lady came back with a glass of water. She set it down on the empty desk. “There you go Scarlet!”

“Why am I here? I shouldn’t be here. Not after almost drowning!” Scarlet said in a worried voice. She meant for it to come out demanding.

“It doesn’t matter.” The lady tried to shrug it off.

“Yes it does!” Scarlet yelled.

“Just drink your water. I’ll be back to check on you later.” She left the room.

Scarlet sighed and got up to get the water. She had the cup in her hand and was about to drink it when Rosalie snatched the cup away from her and dumped it into a pot with a plant in it. "Hey! What did you do that for?" Scarlet asked looking angry.

"Trust me you don't want to drink it." Rosalie said.

"What?" Scarlet looked at Rosalie confused.

Rosalie sighed. "I guess I should tell you the whole story..." She closed her eyes for a second then opened them. "Okay, so that water has a drug that gives you amnesia when you drink it. And I was sent her to find out what Mrs. Happy -that's her actual name by the way- is doing with all the kids she's kidnapped. So I pretended to be a rich kid on a big boat so she would kidnap me. And I’ve been here for like a week, but I haven't found anything out."

Scarlet sat there for a minute thinking about what she just heard. "You're kidding right? I mean why would anyone kidnap a bunch of kids and the only one I see here is you. And why would you be sent here?"

"That's what I'm here to find out. And the...” She looked around. "The...let’s just say someone important sent me to find out what’s going on." She whispered.

"Okay. Someone was dropped on their head to many times." Scarlet rolled her eyes and went over to one of the windows. When she looked out she saw a bunch of kids. There had to be a dozen out there playing. That’s weird. Maybe this Rosalie is right... She turned around. "You were serious...?” She said with weird look to Rosalie.

            A horn went off and Scarlet jumped. “What was that?!” Scarlet asked.

“Oh, it’s time to eat dinner…”  Rosalie said.

“We have to eat at a special time?!”

“Yeah.”

Whatever. Scarlet thought. She just realized how hungry she was and didn’t feel like asking questions. So Rosalie and Scarlet left their room to go get some food.

            After they were finished eating they were sent outside to go get some exercise and fresh air. Then an hour later they were sent inside to get ready for bed. Once they were inside their room Scarlet said, “Jeez, I feel like an animal. I have to do everything I’m told when I’m told to do it.”

“Well…If you want you can help me do something tonight…” Rosalie said.

“Sure. Okay. What are we doing?”

“We’re gonna do some spying.” Rosalie said with a smile.

Rosalie walked over to one of the walls and stoop on her toes. She  hit the wall right below an air vent and the cover fell off. Rosalie grabbed onto the bottom of the vent and pulled herself in. “Come over here Scarlet.” She said once she was in.

Unsure Scarlet walked over. Rosalie was holding her hands out of Scarlet’s. Scarlet put her hands up and Rosalie grabbed them. The next thing Scarlet knew she was in the vent. “Wow. You’re strong.” Scarlet said.

“Yeah. I work out a lot. Just follow me.”

Rosalie started down. They took a left, a right, another right, then a left. When they stopped Rosalie looked at Scarlet and put a finger over her lips signaling not to say anything. Scarlet nodded. Then they heard some voices from below. “My plan is almost ready. We just have to send out the letters to all of the parents of those rotten spoiled kids. Then we will get our money and they get the kids who won’t even remember who they’re parents are.” It was Mrs. Grin. Scarlet gasped.

“What was that?” Someone below asked.

            Then all of a sudden the vent creaked. “Uh-oh!” Rosalie whispered. And the vent underneath them gave way. Scarlet and Rosalie fell through the air and onto the table below.

            Scarlet got knocked out when they hit the table. When they awoke they were in a dark cell. “Uggggghhh. My head.” Scarlet moaned.

“Don’t worry, you aren’t seriously hurt. Just hit your head.” Rosalie said. “But now you’re awake finally we can get going.” Rosalie took the braces out of her mouth.

“What those were fake?” Scarlet asked.

Rosalie nodded then stood up and went to the door. She pushed one end under the door then pulled in up. There was a quiet screeching noise. Then a part of the door fell out.

“Whoa! How’d you do that?!” Scarlet asked.

“There’s diamond in the braces so it can cut through anything. Come on.”

            Rosalie disappeared behind the door. Scarlet followed. “Where are we going?” Scarlet asked. She wasn’t sure what to do. What if they go caught?

“We’re going to steal a boat.” She said.

“What?!” Scarlet asked.

“Don’t worry, let’s just go!”

Scarlet and Rosalie walked down a narrow hallway. At the end there was a window and Rosalie climbed out of it. Scarlet hesitated for a minute. But decided she should follow. They walked in the little forest of trees for a while until they were out of site. Once they were they started walking on the beach. Just ahead Scarlet noticed that there was a small boat. “Hey, don’t we need keys?” Scarlet asked.

            Rosalie stuck her hand in her pocket and took out a key. “Already got one.” After Scarlet gave her a weird look she said, “I found it here on my first day so I took it just in case. You never know.”

They climbed into the boat and Rosalie stuck the key in the ignition but didn’t turn it. Scarlet gave her a puzzled look. “We don’t want them to hear us.” Rosalie said. Scarlet nodded when Rosalie gave her a paddle. They started rowing the boat. Once it was far enough they started the engine. As they were on their way they heard another boat. They turned around scared. It must be someone from that island, Scarlet thought. But it wasn’t. It was a police boat. When it caught up to the girls one of the police men said, “Did you know you guys are driving a stolen boat?”

Rosalie reached in her pocket and took out something that looked like a wallet. When she opened in there was a badge in there that read CIA. “Yes I do.” She answered. “Did you see that island back there? On it are 11 kids. All of which have been kidnapped and will be held for money. We were stole this boat from there, which they probably stole, to get away and tell someone.”

The guy looked at her stunned. “Stay here.” He ordered and turned around to go talk to some of the other guys. After a minute he came back and said, “Okay we called in for reinforcements. We’ll escort you guys back to land and then come back with the other guys to arrest those people.”

Rosalie drove back to land. As they were driving Scarlet said, “YOU WORK FOR THE CIA?! Why didn’t you tell me?!”

“Because, I just thought it would be better in case we got caught if you didn’t know.”Scarlet decided to let it drop.

When they got there Scarlet asked the police man if he had a phone that she could use to call her parents. He dug in his pocket and handed her his cell phone. Scarlet called her parents phone number. When they answered she said, “Mom, Dad, it’s me.” Before she even finished her parents broke out into tears of joy. After Scarlet told them what happened she hung up and said to Rosalie, “My parents are on their way to pick me up.”

“Well we should keep in contact. You’re a good friend.” Rosalie and Scarlet exchanged phone numbers and a few minutes later Scarlet’s parents were there.

 They ran to Scarlet and hugged her. After Scarlet and Rosalie said goodbye Scarlet got in the car and her parents drove off into the sunrise to go home.

The End!

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