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It was hot. Too hot, as things often are in the middle of summer. It was july fourth, and everyone but me seemed to be having a good time. My feet were hanging in the cool blue water of my neighbors pool, as I watched my boyfriend Dan and his twin sister Gabby swim around in the pool. Too me it seemed to hot to do even that. I peeled off my t-shirt and fixed my bikini top, then was about to get into the water, just to please them, when Dan swam over to me and sat on the side of the pool. "Hey babe." He said, and pulled me in for a quick kiss. "Hey Danny." I replied, not really looking at him, and instead looking at Gabby, and how her hair looked when she swam underwater. She too swam over to the side of the pool, and sat on the other side of me. "Hey Bry." she said, using the nickname she had given me in 2ed grade when there was a Brian in our class and he was a boy who mocked me about being Bryan and a girl. "Hey Gabbs." I responded and siged. So this is how it would be always I suppose. Stuck right in between the boy I was dating and the girl I was madly in love with. Little did I know that the complications had only just begun, and what I had dealt with before that day I would die for within just a month. Life can be so complicated.
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| On September 25th 2008 brokenwings122 Said : | |
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I have to say this caught my attention straight away. This is a topic rarely ever broached on this website and I applaud you for having the courage to touch on it. I do hope you continue this, it seems to have alot of potential. I would suggest paragraph format for the up and comming chapters, but I'm sure you were already planning on that. I'm impressed as always, although I do regret taking so long to review this piece. Please review my newest story, Story Book Romance as well as the newest update of Full Moon Rising. Best of Luck! -Caiti |
| On June 17th 2008 xspeaksoftlyx Said : | |
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kmp! |
| On June 14th 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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That's getting my attention!! Kmp! Plz! |
| On June 11th 2008 thuhchris Said : | |
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kmp |
| On June 10th 2008 lovin5life Said : | |
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kmp..its great and grabs my attention right away |
| On June 10th 2008 twilight8218 Said : | |
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agree with individualsong... but yes please continue |
| On June 9th 2008 twilightx28 Said : | |
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Nice. It sounds very interesting. kmp? |
| On June 8th 2008 link3hyrule Said : | |
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OJ...THIS SOUND LIKE ITS GONNA B GOOD. KMP!! check out my outcast pt 8 on my myspace! |
| On June 8th 2008 raetakeninluv1 Said : | |
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kmp |
| On June 8th 2008 xHickChick789x Said : | |
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cool kmpp |
| On June 8th 2008 Lairdnardo Said : | |
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Dont get me wrong, but this is not the kind of stuff someone should be glorifying. It sucks for gay people, but its wrong to do stuff. Go McCain!
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| On June 8th 2008 CassieZ Said : | |
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hmmm interesting. kmp. |
| On June 8th 2008 BabyPenguins Said : | |
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sounds good soo far..kmp... |
| On June 8th 2008 justthegirlxox Said : | |
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kmp please! |
| On June 8th 2008 ShiningKanin Said : | |
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i like it so far! keep me posted please! |
| On June 8th 2008 sportshottie4e Said : | |
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good kmp |
| On June 8th 2008 individulsong Said : | |
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Well, yes, I think you should continue. My only advice is too keep a steady tone throughout the work.... sometimes I can see the character talking, but sometimes I think it could also be you, you know? Otherwise, the story line is interesting. You should continue and flush it out. |
| On June 8th 2008 upyours911 Said : | |
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I like it, plz kmp!
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| On June 8th 2008 Sunloverz Said : | |
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this sounds good so far :) plese continue ! |
| On June 8th 2008 XSilentNoiseX Said : | |
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i wanna kno if there is enough intrest to continue |
| On June 8th 2008 XSilentNoiseX Said : | |
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Hey please rate read and comment!!!!! |


