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The Kiss part 1
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 Created on 2-18-08
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Allyson didn’t know what it was, but something drew her out to the lake that morning. She had seen over a dozen sunrises over the first month of summer but this morning seemed different. There was an excitement in the air when she awoke. Being fully alert at such an unearthly and unnatural hour made her sense that something was coming. Something was on the rise. Something was going to happen.
While hardly looking into the mirror she threw on some capris, a t shirt, with a hoodie, some flip flops, and let her red hair fall loose around my shoulders. On her way out of the door I grabbed my backpack, filled with a sketchbook, journal, pencils, swimsuit, towel, granola bars and a bottle of water.
She went out of the house stepping into the gray before the light of dawn. The shadows that clung all around my grandfather’s farm gave off an eerie appearance. She ran across the yard, past the barn and the apple orchard, up a big grassy hill. The hill descended, rolling down to the lake, which the sun rose above, every daybreak casting gorgeous colors over the unusually dark water.
Allyson sat down on the side of the hill, my backpack still hanging slightly form my shoulder. She remained silent and motionless and let the morning’s peaceful illusions fall before my eyes. The light rose over the land and into the sky, the brightness creeping over the horizon.
Without knowing why she stood up, something in me was aroused. she stood up and saw something. Something moved in the water. Not a frog or fish, or anything she had ever seen before. It was big and almost untraceable in the dark water. She had to get a closer look.
Walking down to the waters edge, she noticed that even though the sun was lighting up the earth and sky the lake was still dark, even more so than usual. It was entirely black.
The water called to her and she stood on the very edge of the land. Leaning over to get a better look, her eyes scanned the lake for whatever she had just seen in the water. The world went quiet. She could only hear myself breath. She reached out and touched one finger to the water’s surface and that was all it took.
A dark twist of water flowed up her finger, my hand, and all the up her arm. With one hard yank from some invisible source she fell head on into the water. She could swim but it didn’t matter because she was being pulled down. She was being pulled by something.
Allyson was pulled and spun around until she no longer knew what was up and what was down. Air was quickly relieved from her lungs and she felt the painful struggle for life being fought within herself. The fight ended with her taking in one huge gulp of water and then blackness, a blackness deeper than the depths of the dark lake.
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Please Login to post comments| On March 11th 2008 onaipwolf Said : | |
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Great beginning. I think it would be better in first person. ;) |
| On February 18th 2008 Lorianne13 Said : | |
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SO.... i must apologize for the changes in grammatic person. I started writting it in one person and had to transpose it to another. I thought that I had caught all the pronouns but I guess not. |
| On February 18th 2008 gikmo9 Said : | |
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you keep switching from she to me. it confusing but otherwise good. |
| On February 18th 2008 tumblegrl1994 Said : | |
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*thumbs up* |
