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Up In Flames [Extremely Short]Uhmm so yeah. VERYVERYSHORT.
Drama
 Created on 7-8-09
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 Story Rating G
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The walls burn black and rot at the sight. She is trapped inside. Running towards the door, she grabs the knob but pulls awak. The doorknob sears her right hard; the skin boils up into retching blisters. She barely notices the pain; the feeling is numb compared to the blazed walls closing in on her. Outside the window, she can see the rest of the city up in flames. She is amazed at what her brothers have done.
[The reason why it's so short is because I really havent thought about adding more or continuing with this story]
Comments
Please Login to post comments| On July 8th 2009 AvengeNovember Said: |
| You could totally develop this into a story. You could start, perhaps, with this piece as the introduction and then cut to maybe an aftermath scene, where the city lies in ruins. She could be in a sort of refugee camp getting treatment for her burns, and basically dying from breathing such noxious air. She could be thinking about how it all happened. Or, maybe she just slumps against the door, sobbing because she knows that she's going to die, and she goes over in her head what started all of this and why she is where she is. And in the last chapter, it could come back to the present to find her as a burning, blackened, charred corpse curled around... some kind of item that has relevance to the plot. Of course that's all up to you. With your descriptive writing, I think the story would be excellent. I know *I'd* read it... |
