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Hostage (12) the end

Horror Created on 1-10-08 Views(179) Story Rating G

The police drove everywhere. Maybe even more than 20 miles and still

they couldn't find anything. Charlotte couldn't remember which way she

went, because all she kept doing was turning, speeding, and going

anywhere she could see. After a couple days, the police finally found

the building but it was very abandoned. There was NOTHING in there.

Not even blood where she stabbed him. So the police had to put the

case aside, because they couldn't find him. And she was ok anyways.

A few weeks later as Charlotte totally forgot about it, there was a

knock at the door. Not suspecting anything, she opened the door only

to find that there was nobody there. She looked around and still there

was nobody. That was fine to her. She just thought it was a simple

ding-dong-ditch. Then, about 5 minutes aftee she closed the door, 

there was another knock. She opened it to find no one there again.

A little later, came a ring from the door bell. Frustrated, she ripped the

door almost off the hinges ans screamed "WHAT?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"

She looked down to see her pink Coach purse lying there on the floor.

She stared at it with big eyes for about 1 minute. She slowly reached

for the purse, carefull of her surroundings. She thought that he might

be out there. She threw it inside and closed the door. When she turned

around, there was Darko. With a gun in his hand. He lifted it up, and

pulled the trigger....

   THE END!!!!!!   I really hoped you guys liked it!!!!! I will be making another story soon. Hope to see you guys post and rate!! Thanx 

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On August 2nd 2008 Taulha Said: 
Taulha But what was he to live from something like that and why did he take her? You need more foreshadowing and should include a bit more about the characters. :3 It'll help your readers understand a lot more.
On August 2nd 2008 Taulha Said: 
Taulha Not bad. :3 I was a bit sad how short it was, but it was nice, maybe some editing could be done and a little more detail, but it sounds really great. The ending was a bit sad. (I was secretly awaiting a sort of strange love story to unfold and the man sounded pretty. :p)
On July 24th 2008 yeaitzJess Said: 
yeaitzJess i dont get why he took her in the first place????????
On January 16th 2008 XxXkillinMeXxX Said: 
XxXkillinMeXxX Haha, REVENGE!
On January 11th 2008 justlikeme1569 Said: 
justlikeme1569 what? Good story he did kill her right?
On January 11th 2008 dancerbabe16 Said: 
dancerbabe16 yikes! loved this story! =]
On January 11th 2008 makana96792 Said: 
makana96792 omg, love it, let me know when you write a new story!!!
On January 10th 2008 lilangel1301 Said: 
lilangel1301 wow!, I love it, when you get the secound one up tell me
On January 10th 2008 necrosiss Said: 
necrosiss rofl. haha. nice.