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Super-Girl! (1)
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 Created on 3-12-08
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"HELPPPPPP!!!!!! HELLPPPPPP!!!!!!" a young girl shouted as a man tried to rape her. She was about 13 years old.
"oh, come on, honey.." that jerk tied her tightly.
Suddenly, there was a shadow of someone near that dark street.
"WHO"S THERE?!" that man shouted. But nobody answered. He tried to rape the girl again. When suddenly a girl's coming...
"BRUGH!" She punched him. She kicked his stomach and lungs. That man shouted.
"Please... release me... forgive me...."
The super-girl released him and he ran in worry.
"Thank you.." the 13 years old girl said.
The super-girl smiled.
"Get back to your family." She said, then she ran as fast as wind.
The 13 years old girl smiled. She didn't realize. That super-girl was wearing Junior High School uniform.
At a warm and peaceful house...
"Hah!" Sara jumped into her bed and lied there.
"It was a busy day... I went to school, did my projects and...
rescue a girl in my age..."
Yes. She was the super-girl.
Sara Michella Hamstons. A cheerful Junior High girl. She was intellegent, smart and kind.
But no one knew...
That she was a super-girl.
TO BE CONTINUED...
PS= Attention please.. What's better for me to write with, PAST-TENSE or just PRESENT TENSE. Please tell me..! Thx...
Comments
Please Login to post comments| On May 20th 2008 williamscott7 Said : | |
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Nice! That's pretty cool! Although, you could try to make it a bit more fluent. But still awesome! Kmp! |
| On May 7th 2008 sasawitto Said : | |
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haha! nice story, waitin for the second episode please! :) lol |
| On March 14th 2008 lillex64 Said : | |
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present tense... Kmp |
| On March 12th 2008 KimSmallwood Said : | |
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eep. i love it! kmp |
| On March 12th 2008 avder Said : | |
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Present tense! KMPP!! |
| On March 12th 2008 bittyb1 Said : | |
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pretty good. Could have added more detail but still cute! KMP! |
| On March 12th 2008 C4444 Said : | |
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Yep, present tense cute story I like this one good job!!!! KMP!!! :) |
| On March 12th 2008 geli01 Said : | |
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present tense, can u slow it down a bit though?
kmp!!! |
