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The Lope-e-us - chapter 1
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Chapter 1 : The Beginning
It all started when I woke up on Mon. Feb. 2, 1568. It was raining and the power was off! I lived in a huge house. It was 4 stories high. My room was on the 4th floor. Before, we lived in the house there was a family that lived here and they was a girl my age and was killed on the 4th floor. People say that this house is haunted, but i don't belive it.
I was thirsty so, i walked out of my room. It was hard to see because it was so dark then, i heard someone screaming help. It sounded like a girl. I sounded like she was being murdered. I thought I was just scaring myself. I went down the stairs, we i was on the 3rd floor the girl sounded so close. I decided to go see if they was really someone screaming. So i went room to room, then the scream sounded so close. All of a sudden, I saw something black with a bloody knife. I screamed. It turned around. It was a ghost!! It said, "I am the lope-e-us Ha Ha Ha." I didn't know what to do. I knew who the lope-e-us was.he was the one who killed the girl who lived here before us. He got his knife and come toward me. I wanted to run but i couldn't. I was so scared. The knife came closer. I was screaming as loud as i could but it was like no one could hear me. I couldn't get away! He stabbed me. All of a sudden i was in a emty room. It black, and i didn't know if i was alone or not.
What happened where am I? I am i dead? There was thousands of questions running through my head. Then I saw someone slowly coming toward me. He said, " Don't sceam no one can hear you." I said, "Where am i? I want to go back home." He said, "You can't you are dead." I said "who are you" He said , "my name is Mark, i am here to tell you your purpose." "What!" Then he said, " Your purpose like what you have to do before you die, but you died too soon to complete your purpose so we are giving you one only the dead can do." Then i said, " Ok what do i have to do?" He said, "You have to stop the lope-e-us from killing anyone else. This will be a difficult task but you must suceed. I said, "Will people be able to see and talk to me." All of a sudden he looked straight at me and said, "No!!! you can't talk to anyone. If you do you there will be consinquiences." I said, " What will it be?" He said," Whatever they decide." I said, " Who is they?" He said," I can't tell you this, but you will soon learn everything you need to learn." I said," What if i don't learn everything i have to know. What if i can't stop the lope-e-us.? He said, " You will do just fine, just listin to everything i say and don't talk to anyone." Then I said, " What if someone can see me?" He said, " No one can see you, your dead. Just do as i say."
Then, It went dark again, and he disappeared. I said, "I can't do this." Then, I started hearing voices. They were saying, "Follow the light, Follow the light," over and over again. I said, " I don't see a light." Then the voices stopped, and one said imagine a light. I tried then i saw a light. Then the voices started again and i did as they said and followed the light, then everything disappeared the voices stoped, and it went dark again. Then, I heard a voice it said, "Close your eyes." I wasn't sure if i should, I was afraid someone would do something to me while my eyes were closed. Then, They said," Close your eyes, if you don't they will come!" I thought for a second, I had no other choice, so i slowly closed my eyes. Then he said," Now open your eyes" I was back at my house, on the 3rd floor in the same spot where i was killed.
That is the end of Chapter 1 please leave a comment and be truefull and if you like it rate it up. Thanks for taking the time to read it.
Comments
| On April 25th 2007 tswieberg Said : | |
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I'll be waiting for the second chapter....good start |
| On April 21st 2007 lilyqueen777 Said : | |
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nice start....it's cool :P |
| On April 11th 2007 coollizzie168 Said : | |
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not bad!! |
| On April 4th 2007 onaipwolf Said : | |
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The plot line is good. It's creative and interesting. The writing itself could see some improvement. Your sentences are too short and you need to be more descriptive. What does the place where she went after she died look like? Why does the ghost have such a weird name and where did it come from? |


