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The Haunted Country Club Chap. 2 |
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Midways' Many Ghosts |
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The Haunted Country Club Chap.1 (part 3)
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"Okay, There are five bedrooms and two bathrooms. Two rooms are designated for the country club. A hall connects all the living quarters including a kitchen. The most active rooms are the first and last bedrooms and the kitchen. There have also been some sightings in the main bar room so we need to keep some cameras there to." Jackson said.
"Well that's it for today see ya'll on Halloween." Chelsea said as the bell rang sending us back to our dull lives.
Let me take this moment to tell you a little bit about Morning Sun. Morning Sun is nestled in some low mountains and high hills along the Appalachian Mts. Morning Sun, VA has a population of three thousand and is quite diverse. Something else I might not have mentioned is the contest is by choice not mandatory.
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| On May 3rd 2007 Qurmudjin Said : | |
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Keep going. It's a good start. Don't worry too much about grammar, spelling and punctuation for now, and focus on making progress. |
| On April 27th 2007 onaipwolf Said : | |
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The last paragraph was very out of place. I suggest cutting the first sentence entirely, and placing the middle sentences in the first chapter close to the beginning. Your explanation about the contest should have been put in earlier. Of course I'm assuming you put this in as an after the fact explanation, but if you choose to rewrite, those are my suggestions. I hope you write some more on this, and I can't wait to see what happens once they finally get in the country club. Ghost stories can be so much fun. :) |
| On April 27th 2007 1luv1hartbrek Said : | |
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Please tell me what you think. I like all the comments I can get. |


