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Would anyone mind..

..taking the time to read my posted writing and giving me feedback on it? I know it's just a prologue, but I want to make sure my writing style conveys what I'm wanting to get across, and no one's yet bothered to check it out, apparently. And please rate accordingly. As I commented on it, if it's received well, I might get around to writing more and maybe post something besides the prologue.
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At 10:29 pm Alastyr Said :
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Last bump for the night before I let this fade into obscurity.
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At 10:18 pm Alastyr Said :
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*bumps again* Maybe people that are on at night just don't like reading...
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At 09:53 pm Alastyr Said :
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La-de-da...
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At 09:46 pm Alastyr Said :
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*bumps again in the hopes that different people are on now than earlier, so that a different crowd will be attracted*
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At 02:41 pm Alastyr Said :
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*bumps to top, trying to see how many people might actually take interest*
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At 02:14 pm Alastyr Said :
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Heheh..thanks. I've been working on developing my writing technique for the past 7+ years. Yes, I know I have a tendency to occasionally repeat the same descriptive words more than I should... The plot, itself, has been in the works for about three years...and character development has been going for five years..
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At 02:11 pm jadedbelle Said :
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I love it! I commented on it, you're descriptions were wonderful! I wanted to do an element series but wasn't sure how to start if off. If I have the desire to post it on here at all. P.S. Your adjectives were awesome!
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At 02:08 pm Alastyr Said :
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So....anyone else want to do some reading?
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At 01:26 pm Alastyr Said :
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Basically, the actual story begins with the Alastyr's successor, and the successor of Darkness. The actual Avatars don't impact the story directly, other than in a few instances, until about a third of the way into the series. At first, it only deals with the successors.
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At 01:24 pm Alastyr Said :
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A close friend of mine is working on Water and Air, and then we'll both combine for Earth and Light.
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