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Last Breath
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Created on 3-14-08
Last Breath
By: xHickChick789x
Struggle to get up
No time to waste
Hanging on for one last take
Can't live without you
I find away to get out quickly
Run and run til I can't no more
Try to hide, but then you find
Now I know I'm in for it
You strangle me til I shake
Beat me til I break
Hurting me
Feelin' dizzy
Getting harder to breath
My face turning red
I can't take it any more
I take my last breath and faint
Created on: 3/14/08
Please Login to post comments| On July 2nd 2008 EdwardRoxMySox Said : | |
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wow.. this is great, really. |
| On April 16th 2008 audica Said : | |
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i liked this one! |
| On March 19th 2008 dsouthernlily Said : | |
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very beautiful |
| On March 17th 2008 stef4732 Said : | |
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I love it :) |
| On March 16th 2008 RealFiction616 Said : | |
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Your rhyming scheme is very weird and unique, but in a good way. For me, this was a good read. |
| On March 15th 2008 kesaia1029 Said : | |
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wondeful job! =) luv it |
| On March 15th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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This one really jumped out at me! So good job! |
| On March 15th 2008 ralicia Said : | |
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It would make a good song, hope its not true |
| On March 14th 2008 icsgrad07 Said : | |
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this is great |
| On March 14th 2008 chinadoll1215 Said : | |
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This is beautiful.. but at the same time really depressing...I love it! :] |
| On March 14th 2008 PeterSteeleYum Said : | |
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VERY depressing, but written well. [: |
| On March 14th 2008 gonzo4201 Said : | |
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I like this, it's pretty all right |
| On March 14th 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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I love this one~ It's open for interpretation, so it makes it more mysterious~ Nice job! :) |
| On March 14th 2008 pjjustin Said : | |
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i'm not sure if you meant for this to happen but i love how you left it open to where it could mean something different for everyone who reads it, poems that stand out are not perfect, and imperfection is beautiful, therefore more beauty is found in our imperfections than if we try to get just right, thus i conclude this is shear beauty good job! |
| On March 14th 2008 UnSane420 Said : | |
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this is beautiful |
