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my mind |
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torn in two |
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uncontrolable |
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shoot me now |
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not enough |
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one day |
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kill me now |
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who will help the fallen? |
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no more |
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to be set free |
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suicide
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Created on 3-5-08
knife to neck slowly creeping, blood draining, cloths turning, body falling, my life is ending.
Please Login to post comments| On March 6th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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I adgree with everyones comments! Don't be afraid to expand your poems! Sometime it's needed! |
| On March 5th 2008 iMorphinexX Said : | |
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You're really good at poems like this, make them longer, you really have talent :] |
| On March 5th 2008 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I think you have a nice start to something. I would love to see you expand on it a bit-maybe elaborate a little more on each idea, throw in some imagery maybe?? |
