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Created on 5-31-08
your voice
my choice
to scared
why care
i bleed
i need
my life
the knife
you came
the same
its you
its true
i care
i share
hold me
i see
my life
no knife
Please Login to post comments| On August 1st 2008 barbarian1 Said : | |
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its verry nice, simple but deep |
| On June 10th 2008 liz720614 Said : | |
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Great:) |
| On June 3rd 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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This is beautiful. I like the simplicity mixed with the strong emotions. The end hit me. Love it :) |
| On June 1st 2008 curkaxboo Said : | |
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thats awesomee!
love it. |
| On June 1st 2008 TheBranster Said : | |
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DAYUM GIRL, DATS SOME MAD WRITIN' RIGHT DER! |
| On June 1st 2008 crazycookie101 Said : | |
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PLEASE DONT READ THIS. YOU WILL GET KISSED ON THE NEAREST POSSIBLE FRIDAY BY THE LOVE OF YOUR LIFE. TOMORROW WILL BE THE BEST DAY OF YOUR LIFE. HOWEVER IF YOU DONT POST THIS COMMENT TO AT LEAST 3 VIDEOS YOU WILL DIE WITHIN 2 DAYS. NOW UV STARTED READIN DIS DUNT STOP THIS IS SO SCARY. xSEND THIS OVER TO 5 QUIZZES IN 143 MINUTES WHEN UR DONE PRESS F6 AND UR CRUSHES NAME WILL APPEAR ON THE SCREEN IN BIG LETTERS. THIS IS SO SCARY CAUSE IT ACTUALLY WORKS 6
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| On May 31st 2008 tiffany1058 Said : | |
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Its not that i didnt care its just i dont take offence i just i felt i needed 2 voice my opion i did take offence when he started calling me shit |
| On May 31st 2008 deadpoet Said : | |
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if you didnt care you wouldnt have posted such a long comment towards my comment. and I only left that comment to give you constructive critism. that is going to happen from time to time. just be happy someone will speak up and try and help you and tell you whats wrong with it instead of lying to you and telling you that its amazing. |
| On May 31st 2008 tiffany1058 Said : | |
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and if you cant imagine wat this is about then your imagination has its limits but mine spreads far into the world unknown |
| On May 31st 2008 tiffany1058 Said : | |
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well thats yall im not going to take it in offense like i care about people rating my poems i dont put poems on here to win i put them on here cause they mean something to me they dont have to mean anything to you this is my poem my feelings i dont expect you to understand and if it gets good ratings good for it but i dont care about winning and i hate win people put stuff on here to win i only care about my feelings and if it means stuff to other people then im glad because poems can heal the broken heart and if it doesnt mean anything to you then why are you taking your time to even comment i love my poems my words and my heart and it can only tell me wat to do and when it feels something im gonna put it down and it means something really important to me and i wrote this poem for me i put this poem on here for me and i love sharing my work rating means nothing to me |
| On May 31st 2008 deadpoet Said : | |
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I agree with Landon. in all honesty this poem deserves NOWHERE NEAR 20 thumbs up. it is way too simple. if you take this to offense, then that's your problem. not mine. a poem with two words per line is pathetic, especially since it doesnt even make sense. this poem has no imagery, the wordplay sucks and I feel no emotion from it because its just words put together that rhyme. Poetry isnt all about rhyming. its about emotion and many other things. I dont even get why someone in here called this poem deep. I just dont feel it. |
| On May 31st 2008 Landon09H Said : | |
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How does this deserve a 20 rating?! It meant nothing to me!!! |
| On May 31st 2008 shelbzjrox Said : | |
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that sounds like my one friend who cut cuz this guy... but stopped when she stopped cing him... |
| On May 31st 2008 jessicabaybay Said : | |
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wow. i understandd how that is.. i lovedd itt :) |
| On May 31st 2008 hpfan731 Said : | |
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it is sooo deep!
love it
you stay away from that knife!
you're too talented to end it |
| On May 31st 2008 smile4evr Said : | |
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wow this is so deep and it just pours out emotions! great work i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
| On May 31st 2008 xanthejasmine Said : | |
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i loved it |
| On May 31st 2008 chibibabe12 Said : | |
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understandable and confusing yet your point was very clear... |
