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Late Night Vision
If my blood spills out across this floor,
I'm sorry if it stains, you're the one to blame.
I hope everyone will understand.
They'll take one look and they'll see you,
With your smoking gun in hand.
This was no accident,
It was carefully constructed.
But you kept the blueprints hidden,
In a secret place that's forbidden.
Your precision in your decision has blurred my vision.
Maybe it's just from all the blood I've lost,
But I swear things are so blurry.
You know you can save me or break me.
Make your choice and I'm begging you to hurry.
You've done some damage but I can manage,
For just a while longer.
Let me die and I'll fade out but save me and I grow stronger.
My heart screams out in agony,
Turn around and come back to me.
End this suffering.
| On June 20th 2007 fgggfx Said : | |
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very sad and intense. great poem! |
| On June 18th 2007 tswieberg Said : | |
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This is amazing. You have talent. I will have to check out more of your poems. |
| On June 17th 2007 xxlostsoul14xx Said : | |
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This is really great! well done! |
| On June 15th 2007 thecolorblack Said : | |
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yes you should make songs out of all of these...well, almost all. :) I honestly love your work. Sorry I haven't got around to reading them like I should have. |
| On June 14th 2007 dieromantic88 Said : | |
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i love it you should turn it into a song |
| On June 13th 2007 hooahmomma Said : | |
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I liked it a lot. I like how it paints a picture. |
| On June 12th 2007 drowningnlove Said : | |
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its fantastic. One of your best! thumbs up!! |
| On June 12th 2007 dolphingrl103 Said : | |
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wow, i love the picture it paints. |
| On June 12th 2007 Johanne93 Said : | |
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this is really good. it all fits perfectly together all it needs is music. |
| On June 12th 2007 atothedogg Said : | |
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wow. this poem is amazing....i love it to death. great job. |
| On June 12th 2007 jewells716 Said : | |
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i love this..... i love the ending i can relate from where it starts... "you know you can save me or break me" and so on from that line up to the end..... it's wonderful. good job. |
| On June 12th 2007 bennyhanna Said : | |
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"Your precision in your decision has blurred my vision" by far my favorite section. Great flow, as the lady said it is a lyric. Well done, kid.
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| On June 12th 2007 pinkpanther93 Said : | |
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wow this could so be a song |


