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Trapped

Views (81) Worry Created on 10-14-07 Flag

Fifteen minutes in a trivial maze seems more and more like a lifetime

Haggard and gleaming, heartless and fleeing, muted and inside the rain

Snow globe on slow-mo, a neverending haze, could that be you with your back on parade

Needy and cut-throat, freezing and envoked, pragmatic and just in the way

Canary style on a swing, broken wing, my cage in my room in my house in my dreams

Cancerous and diluted, mistaken and intruded, Wishful and needing a key

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On October 14th 2007 pru1989 Said :
pru1989 hey thats pretty ccooll!!
On October 14th 2007 ausjo Said :
ausjo Yeah this is pretty good. Some good use of imagery.
On October 14th 2007 alexia66 Said :
alexia66 not bad at all i like it :P, il check osme more later
On October 14th 2007 tervboy Said :
tervboy thanks :)
On October 14th 2007 numbbbb0z Said :
numbbbb0z Very nice, man. How insane is your world making you? How far is your world driving you to the cliff? Are you willing to blow your brains out to be free? What would you do for the key? I like the description - The average person would say it's hopeless and urge you to be happier, but those feelings fade when you've been locked inside yourself for years to come. The reflection is unoriginal but a new twist added. Nice poem.