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shattered

Views (4629) Anger Created on 6-30-07 Flag

With eyes sewn shut they try to show me the way,

but all they show me is that they're liars and fakes.

No matter how hard i try to forget what they said,

their words echo endlessly inside my head.

I won't surrender to what they want me to be,

i won't conform to be another in their corrupt fallacy.

There is a fire in me that only you can ignite,

to stop the pain and the hate that comes from their lies.

I've lost all sense of touch,i feel cold and distant,

it's getting harder to fight the dark,i'm so strained from resisting.

I've stumbled through life with a false sense of direction,

because of their deceit which caused a fatal infection that has broken

my heart and stolen my vision.

I'm looking for that stranger inside of me,

the only person that i've ever wanted to be.

And as i stand here now with my heart laid bare for all to see,

the only left in my way is a reflection of me....

 

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On July 16th 2008 Chuck790 Said :
Chuck790 wow im speechless that was breathtaking um wow!
On April 26th 2008 MissinYou21 Said :
MissinYou21 This is good...Add me and check out my poems.. Plz and thanx
On March 6th 2008 JebasFireRed Said :
JebasFireRed The Ending Was the Line I Like Da Most
On February 27th 2008 AngelOfNight47 Said :
AngelOfNight47 wow talk about my life story written down. It's amazing. it's a very intoxicating poem that has really good meaning behind it. I absolutely love it!
On February 22nd 2008 stephyjeffy Said :
stephyjeffy this is very good very deep too
On February 6th 2008 willtboyd Said :
willtboyd its really good. you release whats been inside and trust me i know thats hard!!
On February 6th 2008 fyuzion Said :
fyuzion i like your train of thought and the cathartic style. if i had a suggestion, it would be to work on making your transitions a little smoother so it just rolls off of your tongue...kinda stumbled a little in spots, over all it was good though
On January 30th 2008 KaytlynnMM Said :
KaytlynnMM omg i love it this is awesome
On January 25th 2008 raymica Said :
raymica I loved it.
On January 22nd 2008 olchii Said :
olchii wel i loved it, espealy cauz i can aboslutly relate.might i humblay sugest however, yoiu could get rid of some unessisary and, because, is or the's. i don know i just dont think oyiu need them to get your point accross. the concret body of the pomesaya it enought.
On January 22nd 2008 seekerovtruth Said :
seekerovtruth Whoa. You just told my life story. That is so freaky, in a good way. haha I absolutely love the rawness of emotion you displayed here. To thine own self be true. Peace
On January 22nd 2008 JEZUZ666 Said :
JEZUZ666 so insightful im in love
On January 22nd 2008 poeticspud Said :
poeticspud I like :)
On January 21st 2008 Dae99 Said :
Dae99 WOW im speechless
On January 21st 2008 slyjamma Said :
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Facing yourself is one of the hardest things to do... cuz when all is said and done... only you remain... so keep being yourself because everyone else's opinions won't matter when you are left by yourself
On January 21st 2008 artfreak101 Said :
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wow this is ah-mazing..u have talent=]
On January 21st 2008 broadwaybound Said :
broadwaybound nice job. you're very talented.
On January 21st 2008 akrovaz Said :
akrovaz I can definitely relate. Keep up the impressive work!
On January 21st 2008 vampsamurai713 Said :
vampsamurai713 wow. i am thoroghly impressed. the words and depth of this poem is very intoxicating. i really like it and i like the demented feeling to express the loneliness.
On January 20th 2008 Ejasmink Said :
Ejasmink Interesting...I don't know if you were trying to capture your feelings along with the feelings of others but you did just that. The fake part is what stuck with me too the end, the need to conform but stay yourself. Wanting to fit in, but not. and then, excepting yourself as you are. Oh sorry got of track (Dov into my personal life). SO anyway great poem.
On January 20th 2008 LizWinker93 Said :
LizWinker93 very deep. keep up teh good work :]
On January 20th 2008 fawzia11 Said :
fawzia11 I really like it!
On January 20th 2008 Gforc3 Said :
Gforc3 good, but it'd be better if you rephrased "liars and fakes." you know, make it more poetic?
On January 20th 2008 13AllAlone13 Said :
13AllAlone13 this is such a great poem! i love it!
On January 19th 2008 N5607 Said :
N5607 Amazing.