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something in your eyes

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broken carnations

Views (305) Love Created on 6-26-07 Flag

my lungs are starting to burn,im feeling weak and cold, and helplessly

alone.

i feel so betyrayed by your hopes,but i dont want to let you down.

my hopes are constantly beset by your absence and i wilt on the inside.

when you're gone everything fades out of view and i cling to the

memory of your embrace.

there is something in your eyes that show me what you see in mine.

and you are my solace in this world uneasy.

you are my broken carnation,beautifully flawed......

 

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On May 19th 2008 shadow211477kb Said :
shadow211477kb There's a few memories your poem triggers me to remeber which is a good thing. i like this one too it's beautifully constucted.
On December 29th 2007 xluckxnumberx7 Said :
xluckxnumberx7 love it
On December 21st 2007 Smarties4 Said :
Smarties4 Amazingly Awesome!! :D
On October 27th 2007 crazygirl2313 Said :
crazygirl2313 i love this one...
On September 13th 2007 HIMDarling612 Said :
HIMDarling612 i really like it, your work is awesome.... i felt like this, but we're hoping i'm over that now
On July 28th 2007 DeanCentricGal Said :
DeanCentricGal wow. i really liked this one. :]
On July 26th 2007 alexia66 Said :
alexia66 wow another great one, you know from readin yours so far im actually moved by the words you have put.
On July 23rd 2007 angelofwar4 Said :
angelofwar4 Oh my goodness, this is too beautiful - I cannot think of a compliment to say that is good enough for this poem! I love it, wonderfully awesome job! :-)
On July 23rd 2007 realpaintheory Said :
realpaintheory absolutely beautiful. it sounds kind of choppy, but that fits in with the whole "broken" theme of it. very good.
On July 22nd 2007 MelissaDA Said :
MelissaDA I love it! it is very well written and i love the concept of it. The words kinda seem to flow out. very nice job.
On July 21st 2007 individulsong Said :
individulsong I like it. I found it a bit choppy, but I think that goes great with concept. I say, if you want to give it to soemone, you should. It's very clear, very well written.
On July 20th 2007 Xpoetxgurlx Said :
Xpoetxgurlx wow. thats realllllllllllllllly good! i loved it!! very very nice! ^.^
On July 20th 2007 TaUroNui Said :
TaUroNui good job keep up the good work XD
On July 9th 2007 PoeticPang Said :
PoeticPang *sparkled eyes*........ very sadly cute,, kinda clingy, huh?....... the flow is excellent tho,,, the structure of each line is formed very well,,, i like ur use of space,,,,,,,,,,, the descriptions flow out reallly good too,,,,,,,,, it's nice,,,,, sweet~ ~~~~~~~Pang
On July 5th 2007 kantokah Said :
kantokah the last 2 lines are my favorite. beautifly writtin.
On June 30th 2007 mcihellejane Said :
mcihellejane I like the concept of this one-nice job