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Created on 6-26-07
one lone figure stands atop a hill,gazing all around
her footsteps are muffled,her breathing is labored,like ever breath is a fight all its own.
the look in her eyes shows fatigue and anguish.
she's losing and she knows it.
the images in her mind blur as tears stain her face.
the sounds churn in her head.
pulstaing sounds,your voice,only she can hear....
the lone figure stands atop a hill weeping...
Please Login to post comments| On April 27th 2008 Nettylouise Said : | |
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sad |
| On January 23rd 2008 seekerovtruth Said : | |
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aghhhhhh So sad. :( |
| On December 23rd 2007 lovehungercree Said : | |
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That was pretty good, who knew that a guy could tell how a heart broken women feels? |
| On December 2nd 2007 blackrose101 Said : | |
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a great revolution of words to strike the heart within |
| On September 13th 2007 Krys59973 Said : | |
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i love the way you describe the girl being exhausted from this pain.., its very dramatic being alone somewhere where you can see everything is something that i like to do when i want to scream to the world..., |
| On August 20th 2007 ybabeyeneerg Said : | |
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that's, wow amazing, I dont care what MelissaDA says it's perfect the way it is, most great poems are the shortest and undescribed |
| On July 27th 2007 daisylady719 Said : | |
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I can actually feel the ache flowing from your words. |
| On July 26th 2007 alexia66 Said : | |
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wow, that was... powerful. |
| On July 24th 2007 Babydotz Said : | |
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Aww... *Tear* |
| On July 22nd 2007 MelissaDA Said : | |
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pretty good, but i think that maybe you should add a little more description to it. |
| On June 30th 2007 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I really like the point of view you used in this- |
