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Deception

Views (1091) Anger Created on 10-3-07 Flag

With every breath i exhale my heart gives way,it succumbs to the filth and begins to decay.

I feel so useless for I have nothing here to gain,there is no strength left,only the shadow of fear remains.

My heart grows so weary from this infection,that was inflicted by all their malice and deception.

I tried to see with the blindest of eyes,I tried to see through their tapestry of lies.

It blanketed my heart and diseased my soul,it birthed in me an emptiness that left me broken and cold.

So now i stumble around in a state of confusion,living each day as an empty delusion.

As each day passes my mind fills with new regrets,as their cancerous lies feed the growing hollow in my chest.

All their hate abandoned me bleeding in the cold,and left me in this nightmare utterly alone.

Their hatred suffocates me as it dwells deep within,I never thought that all these lies would result in my end...

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On January 21st 2008 MariaCeai Said :
MariaCeai It's a very good poem.
On January 21st 2008 SuchLove Said :
SuchLove that's really good, I really like it.
On January 17th 2008 BoyScoutSlayer Said :
BoyScoutSlayer wow nic i like it XD
On January 15th 2008 XLadyLoveLessX Said :
XLadyLoveLessX I love this, it's how i feel in better words than my own.
On January 15th 2008 surefirefailur Said :
surefirefailur The lack of line breaks after those commas confused me. It's an easy fix, you know. I like the imagery and the flow.
On January 13th 2008 jenni24014 Said :
jenni24014 awesome poem! you have a very deep soul.
On January 6th 2008 ralicia Said :
ralicia So dark, I love it.
On December 27th 2007 yeahimalli Said :
yeahimalli Great..wonderfull..you are an excellent writer
On December 23rd 2007 playfulfuzz Said :
playfulfuzz its deep and you et the reader feel the pian your in... i like the word flow and the way you smothe the way for your reader to understand. I think that your style is very effective to catch your readers attention and I think that your talent shows in your work..
On December 22nd 2007 DarkSide1477 Said :
DarkSide1477 wow its really emotional and dark i love it srry i sux at cmnts =P
On December 21st 2007 Smarties4 Said :
Smarties4 Infection - there's that word again :P Great poem.
On December 18th 2007 m3gG1e9o0 Said :
m3gG1e9o0 hey, you told me to read your poems so i am. I think this poem is really great, and shows how you felt when you were writing it. i think what ha7 said about the line not quite rhyming doesn't matter. if you've read any of my poems, you'll know that i don't rhyme everything perfectly, and that's ok. i mean, sometimes, to get the message across, you have to let the rules slide a little. poetry is more about what comes from inside, not if every little word is perfect. and also, i would suggest thinking of your poem as a sort of story. in this one, you sort of repeat the same thing over. im not sure this is what you wanted when you asked me to tell you what i think but here you go. i wrote more than i had planned on
On December 14th 2007 katiejean1461 Said :
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amazing poem
On December 8th 2007 Tearjerker2020 Said :
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Amazing.
On November 27th 2007 Lovelyeyes0 Said :
Lovelyeyes0 Another tip for rhyming... try just picking a generic tune and sing it to it. It helps, trust me. Good job, this one has that gut-wrench to it.
On November 20th 2007 Chase2303 Said :
Chase2303 Wow...LOVE it !
On November 17th 2007 XBewareTenX Said :
XBewareTenX I love it! The rhyme scheme helped bring the flow of poem out more. I enjoyed how you made the poem relatable to all different types of ppl! Great job!
On November 16th 2007 ha7 Said :
ha7 Great poem! But this line "It blanketed my heart and diseased my soul,it birthed in me an emptiness that left me broken and cold." kind of drew me out of the poem for a second. It is the only one that doesn't rhyme. Other than that I loved it!
On November 15th 2007 brosbestfrien1 Said :
brosbestfrien1 love it
On November 13th 2007 icsgrad07 Said :
icsgrad07 you have a real good talent for riding poetry. good job
On November 12th 2007 perfect1not Said :
perfect1not FREAKING LOVE!!!!! YOU HAVE A TRUE TALENT!!!
On November 10th 2007 imapillow Said :
imapillow its awesome
On November 10th 2007 Realmuckoy Said :
Realmuckoy YOU HAVE AN AWESOME GIFT MAN... THIS IS AN AMAZING POEM THAT CAN ONE WAY OR ANOTHER BE RELATED TO... I ENJOYED IT VERY MUCH.
On November 9th 2007 Livinlifelove Said :
Livinlifelove Wow....i love it.....so deep
On November 9th 2007 rain2teardrops Said :
rain2teardrops This has definately got to be my #1 favorite so far. Keep me updated on more to come.