skinneymini17

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Created on 5-14-07

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when you left you went without one tear,

but i am not strong enough to not have you near,

i wonder can you still hear me,

you were so very dear to me and now ur gone,

what went wrong,

you were so strong and i was sure u were going to be all right,

cause the way you held on tight,

you even gave the doctors hope that you might survive the cancer,

even as a dancer you were strong till the end,

i guess god thought it was time to send his angels down,

so here i am on solid ground unable to tell you i love you,

but i know you love me too so i wrote this poem in thought of you.

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On June 18th 2007 lilangelofgod Said :

	wow that was sad.....i liked

On May 23rd 2007 BlkWingDragon Said :

	Sad poem and don't worry about the style it's just fine

On May 16th 2007 Sandwich91 Said :

	hmm, I'm going to a critique for this one. its okay, too further improve your skills, do some research on poetry techniques, try and add simile, metaphors, assonance, onamatopiea (i h8 thate word), remember, the more techiniques the better ^^

On May 14th 2007 dragonslilbit Said :

	sad poem but i loved it keep up the good work and check out my poem its called the mom we lost. let me know what you think