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Views (249) Other Created on 4-24-08 Flag

    She met his gaze of blue

    That's where her ending starts

    She sparkled for him to

    Place love in his heart

    From there they couldn't part

 

    She gave her heart so quickly

    She opened her  fragile soul

    He took it all so hungrily

    Drained her til unwhole

    So here's how this unfolds

       He'll never let her go

 

    Good thing this girl's a dreamer

    Like stars they are her high

    For if he were much meaner

    She'd surely break or die

    Like inner child cry

 

    When did it all start?

    Details aren't my art

    List of all he's done

    To damage any fun

    I give to you list one

 

    When she was nineteen

    She nearly choked

    From big hot hands 

    Squeezing her throat

 

    Her 100 pound entirety

    Was smashed into walls

    With blood on her clothes

    and skin that was clawed

 

    Red streaked hair

    Equals bleeding pressure

    Blood blonde hair

    Meets the corner of her dresser

 

    Bony shoulder blades

    Become his punching bag

    Til she can't even scream

    Where everything seems bad

 

    Like holding her over 

    A two story stair banister

    With eyes that display

    Nothing but sinister

    

    All is done he leaves her alone to cry

    and cuts off all her ties

    Like phone cords sliced

    and doors crashed in

    Broken C.d's 

    Lights go dim

    Shredded pictures of her memories

    Smashed in cell phones

    Stolen keys

 

    He hugs her later

    Kisses every bruise

    Tries to sedate her

    For now he's in the mood

 

    She plans to run away

    Someday~ someday

 

    She'll say 

     

(YEAH~ NOT THE BEST FLOW) 

     

     

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On May 29th 2008 chayeah22 Said :
chayeah22 This was really deep and close to home for me. I love it. Thank you for writing it.
On May 4th 2008 amanda710faith Said :
amanda710faith i thought the flow was great. was it about u?? its really sad and no one deserves to be treated that way. great poem
On April 29th 2008 chinadoll1215 Said :
chinadoll1215 The flow is perfect. I really love this one! I wish I could write as well as you do! :] Great job!
On April 27th 2008 Thugnastay227 Said :
Thugnastay227 wow. and i thought it flowed well too. and i cant stand for any of that kind of mess. i'm a lover not an abuser...though i liked to get beat upon a bit...idk. lol. but i hope this wasnt from experience. like muse said. i got ur back too.
On April 27th 2008 LadyCha0s Said :
LadyCha0s love it. so sad.
On April 25th 2008 flutytute Said :
flutytute *Cries* Wow, reminds me so much of the past... wonderful job!
On April 24th 2008 tiffany1058 Said :
tiffany1058 i love this poem i had no problem with the flow it was great lots of details very real you should really tell me if you write anymore
On April 24th 2008 dropdeadsucka Said :
dropdeadsucka Yeah, like Morbidangel said, you're poem went together nicley. Good job. =]
On April 24th 2008 morbidangel585 Said :
morbidangel585 *sad, not dad lol
On April 24th 2008 morbidangel585 Said :
morbidangel585 awww very dad but i know where ur coming from, seems somewhat familiar..especially the end. but i hope this isnt true about you. but this was really great, even if it wasnt the greatest flow, it went together nicely
On April 24th 2008 twilight8218 Said :
twilight8218 love it!
On April 24th 2008 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 that was awesome, definitely feel the pain
On April 24th 2008 xHickChick789x Said :
xHickChick789x I got full of mixed emotions on this one. wow nice job though :) You get a cookie! lol
On April 24th 2008 sixtiesdoll Said :
sixtiesdoll Unmarried~ also no one equals super man~
On April 24th 2008 Thuggishone Said :
Thuggishone I would say thats a hell of a guy are you dating the hulk cause the dude gotta be taken some steriods to be that violent...Very nicely written word to the wise date a pretty boy not superman next time...till then take care...william
On April 24th 2008 muse4apoem Said :
muse4apoem First to comment! I liked the lines "She opened her fragile soul. He took it all so hungrily. Drained her til unwhole." I paid no attention to the flow of poem. It seemed like it was fine anyway. Really hon you should let him get the best of you! On of my bestfriends was in a marriage like that! My mom was in one to. I hope one day you will find a voice and stop these nightmares! Your way to good for all this! This comment will be fifty pages long. I better stop! If you want to talk to someone I'm here! Even though I'm thousands of miles away from you! I got your back! :)
On April 24th 2008 EvilRaven9892 Said :
EvilRaven9892 It's still mighty powerful. wow
On April 24th 2008 Pikkakard Said :
Pikkakard I disagree... the flow is perfect. It starts off all nice and happy, then speeds up as the poem turns violent. This is well written, and incredibly sad. I'd hate to think of anyone in this situation feeling they could never walk away.

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