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Storybook

Views (232) Other Created on 3-31-08 Flag

    You can't borrow me today

    Filling in the empty spaces

    For when I raise my voice someway

    My lines are cut like LA faces

 

    Delving into my very soul

    As if I'm unsolved mystery

    That heart of yours all black as coal

    Will just conceal my history

 

    I loved you then I miss you not

    Sorry to spoil your tea time

    I loved us when I nearly forgot

    This girl who walked a straighter line

 

    My brightside called me earlier

    She said to tell you bye 

    I sowehow felt myself again

    Now there's a lovely high

    My eyes less blind

    I'm unconfined

    and I won't let me die

 

    You wish to know my storybook

    So I left it on the table

    and if you take a closer look

    You'll see why we're unable~ 

     

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On May 3rd 2008 chinadoll1215 Said :
chinadoll1215 Very well written! I love it! One of my FAVES! :] emotional.. and it has a perfect ending!
On April 20th 2008 amanda710faith Said :
amanda710faith it was really good and creative. my favorite line was " Sorry to spoil your tea time" lol but it also had a great ending. nicely done.
On April 20th 2008 Pikkakard Said :
Pikkakard This is great!! The ending was perfect. A great read
On April 14th 2008 hiphuney420 Said :
hiphuney420 omg! this was sooo amazing seriously like im in awe
On April 14th 2008 hiphuney420 Said :
hiphuney420 omg! this was sooo amazing seriously like im in awe
On April 5th 2008 stef4732 Said :
stef4732 very well written
On April 3rd 2008 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 This is very much wonderful, and has a very nice flow and rythym to it, it is very musical, as I see many of your other comments refer to it as. I really like this one, can't wait for more!
On April 3rd 2008 jeff2625 Said :
jeff2625 I loved it..great poem..
On April 2nd 2008 TheBranster Said :
TheBranster once my brightside gave me a jingle. he told me the darkside was looking for me!
On April 1st 2008 Jermie6363 Said :
Jermie6363 awww shucks i love this one
On April 1st 2008 mypoeticrage Said :
mypoeticrage Thanks for telling me to check your stuff out Im really enjoying your stuff so far, youre definately a talented writer
On April 1st 2008 xkatelynex Said :
xkatelynex totally awesomely awesome~~~like usual!
On April 1st 2008 chayeah22 Said :
chayeah22 This is awesome...really emotional...LOVED IT!
On April 1st 2008 toxxicskank Said :
toxxicskank i love it. your writing is amazing.
On April 1st 2008 hpriestess Said :
hpriestess I love cynical statements whirling around (or inside, if you please) "I am woman, hear me roar" words, lol. Well done love!