Email
Password

Created By

Author's Comments

It speaks on It's own

Rate this Poem

+27
My Poems
+47
+ 30
Ana~Mia
+ 26
My Eyes...
+ 15
MAYBE~
+ 21
Forest
+ 21
Flower*
+ 18
Dreaming
+ 17
Everything's Crying~
+ 16
Untitled*
+ 12
Untitled
+ 16
It's nameless~
+ 19
I wish
+ 18
Feel Nothing
+ 17
Floating~
+ 19
Untitled
+ 17
I won't~

My sister

Views (305) Passion Created on 3-27-08 Flag

    I was much stronger than she was

    I the one dancing, all sassy and chancing

    A little girl lauging more then she does

 

    My sister less daring than I cause~

    She the one crying, all sad, and feared flying

    A little girl seeing more than I was

 

    I danced through the years

    All detailed with mirrors

    Learned I had charm

    Carless unharmed

    With no one to warn me

 

    Of some who were mean for their own buzz

    He was much older than I was

 

    I was still twelve

    When I first felt hell

    My dreams turned to screams

    I danced then I fell

 

    My sister saw Angels

    I looked at demons

    My sister was stronger than I was

 

    I tiptoed through fears

    Hiding all tears

    Eating less and less

    Until I was a mess

    No more

    dancing

    Subtract the

    charm

    No more

    chancing

    Take back the

    harm...

 

    My sister much stronger than I was

    She the one caring, more cautious, less daring

    My sister is better than me cause~

 

    I'm the one crying

    All frightened

    Tried dying

 

    My sister's still stronger than I am...

 

(sorry it doesn't flow well. Not my best really. Still it tells the story.) 

     

Please Login to post comments
On May 28th 2008 moosegurl01 Said :
moosegurl01 just wow..
On April 5th 2008 stef4732 Said :
stef4732 wow this brought tears to my eyes gurl great job :)
On March 30th 2008 amanda710faith Said :
amanda710faith i think its really good. i think strength to realize..that someone is stronger than you..when you thought u were in the first place. if that makes sense lol. =]
On March 29th 2008 vburciaga Said :
vburciaga WOW this one is really strong... i really enjoyed it, i loved it
On March 29th 2008 hiphuney420 Said :
hiphuney420 i think it flows wonderfully because its how it came to your mind if came out that way its your own personal expression. and i love it because its that natural your didnt have to take the time to make it fit and flow well you just let it go and i love the emotion and the way you worded and described it all
On March 28th 2008 toxxicskank Said :
toxxicskank i like it!
On March 28th 2008 flutytute Said :
flutytute This is one of my favorites, definitely! I love it a lot! Amazing!
On March 28th 2008 xHickChick789x Said :
xHickChick789x Yeah this is very nice! Lovez it lots! Great emotion! :)
On March 28th 2008 Thuggishone Said :
Thuggishone It's well written I like it although I like most of your stuff being the only one who understands most of everything you say in poems that pretray happiness and sadness, hurtful and emotinal times it's like your the jack of all trades...onces again lovely
On March 28th 2008 muse4apoem Said :
muse4apoem That dude was being nice! It's wonderful as usual!
On March 28th 2008 ZD1990 Said :
ZD1990 It tells the story like you said, "My sister saw Angels, I looked at demons." I like that for some reason. We both wrote something about our sisters :D
On March 27th 2008 Jermie6363 Said :
Jermie6363 i love it !=))
On March 27th 2008 mcihellejane Said :
mcihellejane Very strong emotions in this one. I like the way you wrapped all the lines and words together towards the end.
On March 27th 2008 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 Very much awesome, I really loved this. I believe that it takes a lot of strength to be there for someone, through all the tough times, even the self destructive habits that one puts themselves through. Wonderfully done!
On March 27th 2008 fawzia11 Said :
fawzia11 *hugs* Awesome! I loved it!