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More of my soul unraveling.Rate this Poem
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Unseen
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Created on 2-23-08
I can slip past
where you stand on the sidelines
Write from a dream
This girl needs to scream
This girl is leaving
unseen.
I can unlearn
every pain If I need to
You can bother me
This girl is sold out
on her dreams
This girl will scratch
out her seams
Cry for every soul
cause I am saddened
Would you help me
to see
Past my world
and onto brand new things
You won't have to stay long
I won't make your day long
Because I just want to sing for you
Or just laugh my way to sleep
I just want to be near you
You can buy my heart for free
There she goes unseen
That girl has left my being
That girl is me
uneven.
Please Login to post comments| On March 18th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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"You can buy my heart for free." I love that line! This is really nice! ~Kudos |
| On March 8th 2008 flutytute Said : | |
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Beautiful! *gives you a hug* |
| On February 25th 2008 tumblegrl1994 Said : | |
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Very nice! *thumbs up* |
| On February 25th 2008 EvilRaven9892 Said : | |
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ow...but brilliant |
| On February 25th 2008 seekerovtruth Said : | |
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I agree with michellejane in that the last two lines really brought it together. "Uneven" was a perfect choice of word for the ending. Brilliant! |
| On February 24th 2008 gonzo4201 Said : | |
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it's really got an interesting flow to it, but it's a good thing. |
| On February 23rd 2008 mizzthang17 Said : | |
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i really like how u write
good job
steph |
| On February 23rd 2008 Thuggishone Said : | |
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me thinks it's them funny pills you been taking..lol...I'm kidding...I think you are good at the way you put your words together and form an art but describe your feelings in each line at the same time incredible |
| On February 23rd 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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Maybe my train of thought is hard to follow??? Next one to read this~ tell me if my poems are hard to follow. thanks~ |
| On February 23rd 2008 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I had to read it a couple of times before I truly understood it all, but I like it. The last two lines really brought it all together! |
| On February 23rd 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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So tell me what you think. I'll return the curteousy.
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