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THIS IS MY FIRST TIME RITEING A POEM....Rate this Poem
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THEY ALL THINK... |
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THE FIGHT |
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why do u....? |
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Dear Mommy, |
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THIS PAIN |
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maybe |
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!!!LABLES!!! |
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my baby |
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The Road Not Taken By: Robert Frost |
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Created on 1-26-08
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THE RAZER SLICES THROUGH MY SKIN
THE BRIGHT RED BLOOD GIVES ME CONFORT
THE PAIN SLASHES THROUGH MY WHOLE ARM
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MY LIFE GOES RED BLUE....BLACK
AND NOW I SEE MYSELF SLASH AGAIN
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IT HURTS WHILE I SLASH AWAY AT MY PAIN
WHILE I TRY TO FORGET THE LIFE I HAVE
THE PAIN PEOPLE HAVE BROUGHT ME
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SO KNOW IN THIS CLOSET BURIED IN MY TEARS
I SLASH AND CRY AND FEEL THE PAIN BECAUSE THATS ALL I'VE DONE
MY WHOLE LIFE AND MY ONLY CONFORT IS.....
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HOPE U LIKED IT BUT IF U DONT PLEASE DONT GIVE ME MEAN COMENTS I CAN FIGHT BACK BUT THIS IS MY FIRTS POEM AND I HATE TO WRITE BUT I DID THIS SO I CAN DO SOMETHING TO GIVE SO IF U DONT LIKE IT GIVE ME SOME TIPS PLEASE INSTEAD OF INSALTS THANK U
SK8R GURL Y_Y
Please Login to post comments| On April 9th 2008 Jush Said : | |
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pretty deep poem. but whats a poem with no emotion of how ur feeling? good job i like it =] |
| On March 24th 2008 ALIESAM21 Said : | |
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I really love this, I know how you feel!!! *hugs* ♥ |
| On February 9th 2008 seekerovtruth Said : | |
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I am sorry you have had to endure so much pain. Change your focus and leave that pain behind you so it doesn't steal your joy for today. :) Peace |
| On February 4th 2008 jeff2625 Said : | |
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good poem, for a first time.like xxcros said you have to pay attention to spelling and punct. very deep poem.. |
| On January 30th 2008 Trena09 Said : | |
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good job for a first... you really got the point across... i like it =) |
| On January 26th 2008 xXCROSSXx Said : | |
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It's really good for a first time.
Just make sure that in the future your spelling is correct.[[ie: writing, insults, first, comfort]]
i give it an 8 out of 10. =]]
good job.
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| On January 26th 2008 ridinbitch0807 Said : | |
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I like it. It's really emotional and conveys the point clearly. That sounded corny but it's true. Good first time! XD |
